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GA Review

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Reviewer: BennyOnTheLoose (talk · contribs) 14:20, 13 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a. (reference section):
    b. (citations to reliable sources):
    c. (OR):
    d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a. (major aspects):
    b. (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
    b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Happy to discuss, or be challenged on, any of my review comments. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:20, 13 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Copyvio Check

  • I reviewed the three non-zero matches found using Earwig's Copyvio Detector. No concerns.
  • No issues about close paraphrasing detected; some machine translations had a bit of similarity to the article text but nothing I felt was unacceptable.

Image

  • Image is CC. Relevant, in infobox, with ALT text and a suitable caption; so all OK. Signature image is PD.

Early life and career

  • I'm not sure about the link from "common fact of life for many women". Maybe reword to use the term "Female education" and link that? (MOS:EASTEREGG)
  • Spot check on She completed portions of her primary schooling in her hometown up to the seventh grade but dropped out before advancing further - no issues
  • Spot check on Her situation reflected a common fact of life for many women in rural agrarian areas of the country, where high school attendance, much less graduation, was often infrequent, even into the second half of the twentieth century - no issues.
  • Her first functions were sounds slightly odd.
  • Spot check on rapid rise through the ranks of women's union leadership culminated in her 2008 election. I'm relying on machine translation, but I don't see this supported in the source.
  • Fifth line, states: "Ejecutiva de la Federación Regional Única de Mujeres Campesinas Irupana (FRUMCI) 2008-2010 y reelecta en la gestión 2010-2012." I took "reelected" here to indicate that her initial assumption of office was also subject to an election. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 22:14, 14 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • secretary of defense of the coca leaf - this seems like a direct translation, is it a suitable way to phrase that? (I have no suggestion, I just don't know.)

Chamber of Senators

  • Perlacios became the first-ever member of the Afro-Bolivian community to serve in the Senate and is the most recent individual to do so to date. - can't this be simplified to say that she is the only-ever "member of the Afro-Bolivian community to serve in the Senate"? Probably best to add an "As of.." and the year, to futureproof the statement.
  • Spot check on one of the first two black women to have served in parliament - no issues.

Electoral history

  • Looks OK.

Infobox and Lead

  • "Preceded by Fidel Surco / Succeeded by Cecilia Requena" is not referenced.
  • occupied a unique position in Bolivian parliamentary history is true, but reads a bit like MOS:PUFFERY to me.
  • I think it would be worth adding some of the info from the tenure section into the lead, although of course the lead shouldn't be too long for a relatively short article.

Sources

  • All look OK.
  • Optional: Cámara de Senadores (2016) - current citation is as a magazine, but there's no "magazine=" parameter. Would it be appropriate to use cite book instead?

Thanks for your work on the article. Krisgabwoosh. There are no major issues; I'll place it on hold. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:01, 13 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Krisgabwoosh: I think it's just the point about "rapid rise" left to address. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:57, 15 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I'm satisfied that the article meets the GA criteria, so am passing it. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 09:09, 15 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.