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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 03:18, 13 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this review on. It may take me a few days to work through it, though. Hog Farm Bacon 03:18, 13 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Background
  • There's several instances of "would be". In various GA/ACR article's I've sent through the reviewing process, multiple editors have strongly objected to most instances of the would be phrasing as excessively passive voice
    checkY Except that "would be" is not the passive voice; it's the past future tense. Removed a couple of instances though. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The Overlord plan called for the capture of Cherbourg by D plus 8" - Probably best to have a brief gloss stating what D plus 8 means. I understand this, but readers without a good military history background may not.
    checkY Added a parenthetical explanation. In some other articles I have eschewed the use of this idiom, but the problem here is that D-Day moved. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Breakout and pursuit
  • " as a deception formation" - Is there a link for this? I understand what this indicates, but it's not a particularly common phrase.
    checkY Added a bit, with a link to Operation Fortitude. It doesn't explain "deception" either though... Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • " There were significant differences in the way Patton, a cavalryman, and Bradley and the VIII Corps commander, Major General Troy H. Middleton, who were both infantrymen" - I'd recommend linking to cavalry and infantry at the respective points, which would help underscore the difference for the uninformed.
    checkY Added links. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and SHAEF had" - This is the first appearance of SHAEF. What does the acronym stand for?
    checkY An artifact of splitting the original article in tow. I was afraid of this. Added an explanation. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
POL
  • "The MT80 supply was adequate for the first month of Operation Cobra" - First mention of MT80, link or gloss what it is
    checkY Another artefact. Added an explanation. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "with the First Army burning 501,000 US gallons (1,900,000 l) per day (282,000 US gallons (1,070,000 l) on 24 August alone)" - This is an odd clause. You state that it was using 501,000 gallons of fuel per day, indicating an average, but then call out a number barely half of that as if it is a significant usage. I think there's a minor phrasing error here somewhere.
    checkY Typo. Should have 782,000 gallons (2,125 tons). Aside: the Germans measured their fuel in cubic metres. Fortunately, the mental conversion to kilolitres is pretty easy. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link C-ration
    checkY Linked. Another artefact. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

And that's through the end of the POL section. More to come, but I've only found minor prose comments so far. Looking like a great article. Hog Farm Bacon 04:46, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Due to the split, it has already passed GA and A class once; problems arise from the split itself. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:06, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Railways
Motor transport

Through the motor transport section. More to come later. Hog Farm Bacon 20:39, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Ports
Duplinks
Captions
Final note

That's it I believe. Heck of an article. Hog Farm Bacon 23:34, 14 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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