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Reviewer: Go Phightins! (talk · contribs) 21:12, 15 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this page. Go Phightins! 21:12, 15 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead
  • Unlink yards, meters, and oval per WP:OVERLINK.
  • In order to continue their drive down the field, the offense must advance the ball at least ten yards down the field in a series of four downs; if they succeed they receive a new set of downs to continue their drive, but if they fail they turn the ball over to the opposing team. to In order to continue a drive, the offense must advance the ball at least ten yards down the field in a series of four downs. If they succeed, they receive a new set of four downs to continue their drive, but if they fail, they turn the ball over to the opposing team
  • Not a big fan of the long descriptive links. Perhaps you could say something to the affect of "via a touchdown (blah blah blah), a field goal (blah blah blah)" etc. and link the term, rather than the description.
    • Done, but in inverse - I give the term after the explanation. Since this is an introductory article, a quick explanation could be helpful to people who don't understand the sport. Toa Nidhiki05 21:54, 15 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Gameplay
History
Teams and positions
  • If you're trying to link to Two-platoon system, you're going to have to link to One-platoon system#2.2 Arguments in support of two-platoon football, but since that really is not helpful, I would suggest unlinking "system" entirely.
  • I think it would be better to call it a tailback, as opposed to a halfback, as if I'm not mistaken halfback is not a running back in the CFL, which plays American football, I think. Not a big deal either way though.
    • The CFL plays Canadian football (very similar to American football in most respects), and a halfback is a defensive player there. I'll add tailback next to HB to be safe.
  • Sorry, got sidetracked with an article on uniforms in American football. Anyway, back on.
    • No problem. :P
  • "are on the same page", that's an expression that might not be familiar globally; perhaps we could substitute something?
    • Changed to 'doing their jobs', hopefully that works
      • Fine by me.
  • ballcarrier to ball carrier in defense
    • Fixed.
  • In the linebackers section, could we change "watching the tight ends and backs in the passing game, and covering wide speedy receivers" to "guarding tight ends and backs in the passing game and covering slot receivers"?
Equipment
  • This section is a bit sparse. Perhaps you could add a line on the improvement of helmets due to concussion issues or something of the like.
Formation
Rules
  • This section looks excellent. Just a couple things:
    • Could we change "try" to "PAT"?
    • The field section is almost too referenced...could we edit out a couple of the unnecessary ones. If they're all necessary, OK, but it just seems a tad "overkillish", if that's a word
      • I would have to go back to the rulebooks and rework all the citations there to make it have less. The citations are as specific as possible right now. It would take quite a while though.
    • Perhaps this isn't available that you can find, but is there any explanation for why we have orange flags on the goal posts? Wind?
      • I can't source that but yes, that is what they are for. It gives the kicker a little bit of help there, although many kickers also pick up some grass and drop it to see what the wind is like. Toa Nidhiki05 03:02, 16 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    • In the officials section, mention that the umpire was moved into the backfield in the NFL.
    • The field goal assignments need some work in that section. I'm pretty sure the umpire and side judge stand about 10 yards behind the line of scrimmage while the back judge and field judge stand under the goal posts. It's pretty ambiguous as is.
      • I'll just remove the mention right now - the Dummies book must have been written before the official location change. Strictly speaking, official location isn't too important to a casual reader. Toa Nidhiki05 03:02, 16 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
        • Probably true. And that's right; we now have 7 officials, the book could've been written when there were still five, although a side judge didn't exist then, so who knows.
          • Yeah.
Leagues and tournaments
  • Perhaps you could give mention to some other leagues that exist in the US (e.g., Arena football, United Football League, etc.) rather than just the NFL and NCAA.
    • I do mention the arena league, in the second paragraph there. I didn't mention the UFL because it is basically insolvent, but I could give a short list of it along with other defunct leagues (like the AFL, AAFC, and USFL). Toa Nidhiki05 03:02, 16 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Variations and related sports
  • Looks fine.
References


I've passed and listed the article. Good work. I'm supposed to encourage you to review another article in the GAN reviewing instructions, so you are hereby encouraged. (If you'd like, you can review one of my outstanding ones -- 2012 Liberty Bowl 2013 Cotton Bowl Classic but of course you're under no obligation whatsoever to do so) Thanks for all of your work on this article, and congratulations on achieving your 37th, by my count, good article. Go Phightins! 17:21, 20 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]