Talk:Ambush predator/GA1
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Reviewer: Happy to take a look at this Enwebb (talk · contribs) 14:24, 26 September 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:12, 26 September 2019 (UTC)
One of the first things that struck me is that the article looks "cluttered" with images, many of which are sandwiching the text (MOS:SANDWICHING). Not part of the GACR, but perhaps consider ways to rearrange or consolidate images
- Done.
Can you gloss explanation of "chelicerae" after usage?
- Done.
Inconsistent usage of whether you use just common name (trapdoor spiders; mantis shrimps) or common name followed by linked scientific name ("warteye stargazer (Gillellus uranidea)" "devil scorpionfish (Inimicus filamentosus)")
- Fixed.
Some excessively close paraphrasing for my taste. See this diff, this link from Earwig, and this link from the Wayback Machine, showing that the Desert Museum website is not mirroring this WP content, but rather is being closely paraphrased here.
- Reworded.
I don't anticipate I will have much more to say, but still need to go over the licensing of all the images used. Enwebb (talk) 14:24, 26 September 2019 (UTC)
I added a CN tag to a paragraph that ended without a citation
- Reffed and named example.
Frogfish should be linked at first occurrence in body; currently linked from the lead and from a photo caption
- Linked.
For...striking very hard and fast (mean peak speed 2.30 m/s (5.1 mph) and mean duration 24.98 ms)
you should have 5.1 mph enclosed in square brackets per MOS:BRACKET ("If sets of brackets are nested, use different types for adjacent levels of nesting; for two levels, it is customary to have square brackets appear within round brackets") a bit nitpicky, I know :)
- Removed one set of brackets.
Is the image of the tasseled wobbegong acceptable to use? The flickr page says all rights reserved- The license was probably changed retroactively, I checked here. Enwebb (talk) 20:21, 26 September 2019 (UTC)
- I've used another image which was explicitly reviewed on Flickr and found to be correctly licensed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:39, 27 September 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks, looks up to scratch with the 6 criteria now. Pass. Enwebb (talk) 15:20, 27 September 2019 (UTC)