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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 00:19, 24 June 2016 (UTC)
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[edit]- Please remove any of the following unused parameters, not unless valid and cited information can be added to them:
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Lead
[edit]Paragraph 1
[edit]- "They began work on the series in January 2013, and 15 issues were published by Image Comics between November 2013 and June 2015." --> "The duo began work on the series in January 2013, before publishing 15 issues through Image Comics between November 2013 and June 2015."
- "The series has been collected into three trade paperbacks." --> "The series has since been collected into three trade paperbacks."
Paragraph 2
[edit]- "The series received positive reviews from critics who compared it to other popular science fiction stories, although Luna's artwork was sometimes criticized." --> Why was Luna's artwork sometimes criticized
Publication history
[edit]Development
[edit]- "Jonathan Luna had previously created comics with his brother Joshua, but was exhausted after six straight years of work." --> No source
- "Inspired by a TED Talk, he decided to take a sabbatical." --> No source
- Both of these points came from the same source, which is at the end of the paragraph. Do you want me to cite each sentence?
- No, that won't be necessary. Thanks anyway; I understand now. Carbrera (talk) 21:55, 26 June 2016 (UTC)
- Both of these points came from the same source, which is at the end of the paragraph. Do you want me to cite each sentence?
- "Inspired by a TED Talk, he decided to take a sabbatical." --> "Inspired by a TED Talk, he decided to take a break from working." (Not everyone may know what a sabbatical is.)
- What year was Star Bright and the Looking Glass published in?
- "Beginning January 2013, they discussed the project for three or four months and created an outline for the whole story.[1][4]" --> "After initializing the concept in January 2013, the two discussed the project for three or four months before creating an outline for the whole story.[1][4]"
- "Luna wrote the first draft of issue one, then the two worked together on rewrites.[4]" --> "Luna wrote the first draft of issue one, while the remaining issues were written by both of them.[4]"
- Rewrote for clarity. Argento Surfer (talk) 12:44, 24 June 2016 (UTC)
Publication
[edit]- "The series has been collected into three trade paperbacks, each containing five issues." --> No source
- Source added. Argento Surfer (talk) 12:44, 24 June 2016 (UTC)
Plot
[edit]- All good! :)
- Woo hoo! Argento Surfer (talk) 12:44, 24 June 2016 (UTC)
Reception
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[edit]- Please remove the wikilink to "Comic Book Round Up"
- "Customer reviews have also been favorable, with scores of 4.22/5[11] and 4.4/5[12] according to Goodreads and Amazon respectively." --> Not necessary; please remove both of the statements and sources accordingly
- Rest is great!!
References
[edit]- Please change "Reflist" to "Reflist|30em"; thanks
End of GA Review:
[edit]On hold for seven days to address the issues I have mentioned above. Thanks for the review and good luck! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 01:02, 24 June 2016 (UTC).
- All addressed except for the first couple points in development, pending clarification. Thanks! Argento Surfer (talk) 12:44, 24 June 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks so much for addressing everything! It all looks great and will be passing now! Fantastic work! Carbrera (talk) 22:01, 26 June 2016 (UTC).
- All addressed except for the first couple points in development, pending clarification. Thanks! Argento Surfer (talk) 12:44, 24 June 2016 (UTC)