Talk:Al-Fa'iz bi-Nasr Allah/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 18:24, 11 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Will take this on. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 18:24, 11 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

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1.a Y

1.b Y
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2.a Y

2.b Y

2.c Y

2.d Y
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3.a Y

3.b Y
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4.a Y
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5.a Y
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6.a Y

6.b Y

No DAB links Y
No dead links Y
No missing citations Y
Passes spot checks Y

Discussion

Prose Suggestions

Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Lede

Suffering from epileptic seizures, al-Fa'iz died at the age of eleven currently merely suggests he died of a seizure, suggest Suffering from epileptic seizures, al-Fa'iz died of one at the age of eleven

Life

he was mutilated and killed by being beaten to death by the palace women suggest simplifying to he was mutilated and beaten to death by the palace women
@Cplakidas: That is all of my suggestions; a fascinating article. Passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 23:47, 11 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for the review and the suggestions, Iazyges, they have been implemented. Constantine ✍ 07:57, 12 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]