Talk:Air pollution in Turkey/GA1
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Reviewer: Editoneer (talk · contribs) 12:36, 21 August 2020 (UTC)
Greetings.
Well-written, Neutral, Stable
[edit]see cited source
, would it really be a problem if you just say the answer in there? Remember that Wikipedia is supposed to have all information in store, you can't just break the narration mode to suggest the readers to click on the citation.
- Done
- I suggest combining both tabel cells. Click on a tabel cell then ctrl+left-click the one below and then press merge and delete "as above."
- Done
Editoneer (talk) 12:21, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Done
and those built before 2015 were:
considering this was in 2015, it's really information that is not really important as of now. I suggest to delete those linked with 2015 as there's already one with 2020 results.
- Done
(see cited source for more details, such as some SO2 exceptions)
, Please just write the SO2 exceptions, the way you are telling the viewers to click on the source because you don't seem to want to write it, it's not okay for an article written on an encyclopedia.
- Done
Illness and death
, It would be better if you rename the section "Medical dangers". Also illness isn't pluralized.
- Done
- [27] seems to have updated to 0.4 years per person.
- Done
the air quality index Istanbul's
, I think a comma been forgotten between "index" and "Instabul's".
- Done
Lack of monitoring
, this section can be merged wih the one above.
- Done
- I suggest
Policy
;Opposition
;Limits
to be merged with the sections from above or even with the lead section.
- Done
Sources
, I suggest just letting the article talk in citations.
- Considering
- Consider this: The sources are literally citations you can just tag to a phrase and is all done. The sources section isn't necessary and it looks like an user been paid to indirectly advertise those pages. Editoneer (talk) 06:46, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- After some consideration I decided that this cite format is best here because 1) It is neater when citing different pages from the same report 2) It matches the format in related good articles such as Coal in Turkey and Greenhouse gas emissions by Turkey.
- Very well. Editoneer (talk) 12:21, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- After some consideration I decided that this cite format is best here because 1) It is neater when citing different pages from the same report 2) It matches the format in related good articles such as Coal in Turkey and Greenhouse gas emissions by Turkey.
- Consider this: The sources are literally citations you can just tag to a phrase and is all done. The sources section isn't necessary and it looks like an user been paid to indirectly advertise those pages. Editoneer (talk) 06:46, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Considering
Verifiability
[edit]- Ankara, Erzurum and Bursa doesn't have a citation of air pollution. As Ankara and Erzurum seems to be capitals it would make sense but the common reader doesn't know about Bursa.
- Removed - will add more recent info somewhere in article
and is one of the worst in the OECD according to a 2019 study by the Health Effects Institute.
, can't you put a citation linking the study? Saying that this is from a study and not linking it doesn't count.
- Removed as I cannot find a 2019 source - will add more recent info somewhere in article
- [7] doesn't quite tell me about the regulation towards that pollutant.
- Done
- [12] doesn't source me anywhere.
- Are you sure you meant [12]? The doi works fine for me to the abstract of "Air pollution analysis for Ankara by air pollution index highly correlated with meteorological variables". Cite numbers have changed with my editing - is there still a problem with a cite link?
- Yes, now it doesn't have a link. Editoneer (talk) 06:50, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Do you mean the cite for "As of 2018 Turkish coal is still burnt for home heating in low-income districts of Ankara and some other cities."?
- Yes, now it doesn't have a link. Editoneer (talk) 06:50, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Are you sure you meant [12]? The doi works fine for me to the abstract of "Air pollution analysis for Ankara by air pollution index highly correlated with meteorological variables". Cite numbers have changed with my editing - is there still a problem with a cite link?
- There isn't dust mentioned in the citation, is there something I am supposed to be looking for?
- Nevermind, the link works now. Editoneer (talk) 12:21, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- I used "dust" as a simpler word for the "Particulate matter" in the cite. Changed to Particulates and linked column header.
- Dust is a particle, particle isn't dust. Editoneer (talk) 06:46, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Done
- Dust is a particle, particle isn't dust. Editoneer (talk) 06:46, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Can you tell me the information that is within [19]?
- Done
- [21]; [24]; [28]; [40]; [41] has no links.
- I cannot find this problem. If there are links which still have problems could you possibly tag them in the article?
- The links above literally says "EEA (2019)" then has no links, and I need you to elaborate the problem with links having problems. Editoneer (talk) 12:21, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Done
- The links above literally says "EEA (2019)" then has no links, and I need you to elaborate the problem with links having problems. Editoneer (talk) 12:21, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- I cannot find this problem. If there are links which still have problems could you possibly tag them in the article?
As of 2018 Turkey emits one percent of the world's greenhouse gas emissions.
Although you linked a different article, this phrase still needs a citation for confirmation.
- Done
The Turkish national electric car is planned to start production in 2022.
, source.
- Done
Broad in its coverage
[edit]"Air pollution in urban centers, often caused by transport, and the use of small-scale burning of wood or coal, is linked to a range of health problems"
, it is unclear where is this being quoted from.
- Removed - will add better cited info somewhere in article
OECD
What does this stand for?
- Linked
- WP:TECHNICAL, it requires you to just explain it shortly, just say the company name and then put (OECD) after it. Editoneer (talk) 06:46, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Done
- WP:TECHNICAL, it requires you to just explain it shortly, just say the company name and then put (OECD) after it. Editoneer (talk) 06:46, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Linked
- What is
MW
- Linked
- WP:TECHNICAL, you just need to say megawatts and then put (MW) and possibily also say what measures. Editoneer (talk) 06:46, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Linked
- What is a linear decrease?
- Removed
or all plants of 50MW
, it's better to write "nuclear power plants" instead of just "plant", as every reader might not understand what the phrase is saying by "plant".
- Removed
As of 2017
;As of 2014
;As of 2018
;As of 2019
But as of 2020?
- Perhaps this got fixed by another edit. If there is still a problem let me know.
- Broad audience might not know what
fossil fuels
are.
- Linked
- You need to explain what fossil fuels are. Editoneer (talk) 06:46, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Done
- You need to explain what fossil fuels are. Editoneer (talk) 06:46, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Linked
Air quality index
, explain what that means.
- Done
A study of 2015/16
, but one from 2020?
- Sorry I don't understand - what is the problem?
- The study is from 5 years ago, is one that is more recent? Editoneer (talk) 06:46, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- I will leave it there for the moment but if I find a source which supersedes it I will remove it.
- If you can't find a more recent study that's fine, you can keep the one that's older then. Editoneer (talk) 12:21, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- I will leave it there for the moment but if I find a source which supersedes it I will remove it.
- The study is from 5 years ago, is one that is more recent? Editoneer (talk) 06:46, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Sorry I don't understand - what is the problem?
Media
[edit]- Considering the citation said about water pollution, does the first picture also spots something about that?
- Maybe I will get around to water pollution next year!
- Oops, sorry, I forgot that is about air pollution and not pollution in general. Editoneer (talk) 12:21, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Maybe I will get around to water pollution next year!
Thank you for submitting an article to reach for GA standards. Editoneer (talk) 12:36, 21 August 2020 (UTC)
New problems
[edit]- MOS:LEADLENGTH requires to combine "The Climate Change", "Right to Clean" and "As of 2019" to be combined together. Editoneer (talk) 06:53, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Done
laxer
is not a common word, can you replace it with "stricter"?
- Reworded
Persistent organic pollutants
, the subheader seems to claim that there's no reports with that, I think it should be removed. Or it's something important that's related to air pollution but I'm missing?
- Amended but if it needs further explanation or clarification please let me know
average excess loss of life
, "life" isn't pluralized.
- That is correct
As of 2019 measured with the air quality index
, the wording makes me think that the year been measured with the AQI instead of the city. Also comma after 2019.
- Moved AQI explanation higher up to try to make this clearer
economic costs of the reductions in the intelligence of adults
, the adults is losing IQ from the pollution, I don't seem to get my head wrapped around this sentence.
- You understand correctly - adults have lower IQ because of the pollution - but whether individuals have lost IQ they used to have or whether children have not developed their potential IQ I am not sure - I guess probably mostly the latter - if I had not been exposed for so long (not just in Turkey) I would perhaps be able to write a better article
- No need to beat yourself up, not everyone is experienced and also there's far more worse articles than this particular one. Editoneer (talk) 08:02, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
- Linked to Air_pollution#Central_nervous_system for readers who want more general info
- No need to beat yourself up, not everyone is experienced and also there's far more worse articles than this particular one. Editoneer (talk) 08:02, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
- You understand correctly - adults have lower IQ because of the pollution - but whether individuals have lost IQ they used to have or whether children have not developed their potential IQ I am not sure - I guess probably mostly the latter - if I had not been exposed for so long (not just in Turkey) I would perhaps be able to write a better article
by burning fossil fuels a reduction of
, this sentence doesn't sound good to me.
- Reworded
for example of
I feel the "of" is misplaced.
- Reworded
- Can you move the [40] reference to the end of the sentence?
- I mean [44].
Editoneer (talk) 12:21, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- Done
I'm going to do another review to check for problems, the last problem to be corrected. The last problems appears to be the "for example of" and the reference moving. Editoneer (talk) 08:02, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
Okay, last edit.
- Move the "Instanbul" placed below "By city" to somewhere more appropriate above, and just remove the whole subheader and the Bursa. And that's all. Editoneer (talk) 08:49, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
- Yes you are right those city subsections were too short. I have combined them under a heading of "urban" but if you can see a better place to put that info let me know.
Okay, last edit.
- What is
climate change mitigation
.
- Retitled link to "helping to limit climate change"
That's lovely, now I'm going to put it on second opinion. Editoneer (talk) 11:11, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
Second opinion from Larry Hockett
[edit]I'll be happy to provide a second opinion here. I hope to post some initial feedback shortly. Larry Hockett (Talk) 05:36, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
I have some concerns that need to be addressed before this is ready for promotion to GA. Most of them are related to GA criteria #1 and #3, or the clarity and breadth of the writing, but there are also some problems that decrease verifiability (criterion #2). I will list my observations section by section.
Lead section
[edit]- You don't need many references in the lead section because this section should just summarize material that is already cited in the body of the article.
- Removed refs from lead
- "most lethal environmental issue in Turkey" - This doesn't seem to be mentioned in the body of the article and I don't see where the cited reference mentions lethality. Death is definitely an important medical danger, so it should be mentioned in that section of the article.
- Mentioned as suggested and quoted "2019 yılında tüm ölümlerin %7,9’u" which means ""7.9% of all deaths in 2019" and is on the webpage which links to the report. I think things a person does to themselves like diet (except perhaps children's) and smoking (except passive) don't count as environmental issues: so it would be impossible for any other environmental issue to be more than 8% unless, God forbid, there is an accident worse than Chernobyl at the Armenian Nuclear Power Plant just across the border. So "most lethal environmental issue" seems obvious as it is more than road accidents. But I can remove it if you think that would be best.
- I just think lethality can be interpreted different ways. If I walk outside and breathe in the polluted air, even for days and days, it is not plausible to think of that as a cause of death. My chances of dying would be higher in a climate-related natural disaster, for example. At the same time, I understand that pollution is a contributing factor in a lot of deaths, and I'm okay with your explanation here. Larry Hockett (Talk) 11:59, 15 September 2020 (UTC)
- Mentioned as suggested and quoted "2019 yılında tüm ölümlerin %7,9’u" which means ""7.9% of all deaths in 2019" and is on the webpage which links to the report. I think things a person does to themselves like diet (except perhaps children's) and smoking (except passive) don't count as environmental issues: so it would be impossible for any other environmental issue to be more than 8% unless, God forbid, there is an accident worse than Chernobyl at the Armenian Nuclear Power Plant just across the border. So "most lethal environmental issue" seems obvious as it is more than road accidents. But I can remove it if you think that would be best.
- "Although there is some monitoring of air pollution compared with other European countries" - Do you mean that Turkey has more monitoring than some European countries? If so, that's too vague - how many? The source is a 21-page pdf, so a page number would be helpful. Is there a more recent source than 2013?
- Oops - moved comma which had changed meaning - and changed the cite
- "on the pollutant PM 2.5" - Is PM 2.5 a specific pollutant? If I understand correctly, PM 2.5 refers to particulate matter from various pollutants where the particles have a diameter of 2.5 micrometers or less. You have two wikilinks to particles in the lead; change the second one to link to particulates, because this helps to explain the naming of PM 2.5.
- Yes it is a specific pollutant and you understand right - cannot find link to "particle" - maybe someone else changed it already
- If PM 2.5 is a specific pollutant but I believe it refers to particulate matter from various pollutants, I don't see how my understanding could be correct. Larry Hockett (Talk) 23:42, 21 September 2020 (UTC)
- OK in order that the lead is not too technical I have changed it to read "There is no limit on very small airborne particles" whereas in the body I have changed it to "Regulations in Turkey do not contain restrictions on particles less than 2.5 microns in diameter (PM 2.5), which cause lung diseases" with both a cite and a link specifically to "PM 2.5" which is currently a redirect but someone might write an article in future as it is so important. According to the linked article it seems that it is the size rather than the composition of the particles which is important as it "tends to penetrate into the gas exchange regions of the lung (alveolus)". This is why so many countries have a limit on PM 2.5. I could write more in the "particulates" section but I am reluctant to duplicate the info which applies to all countries.
- If PM 2.5 is a specific pollutant but I believe it refers to particulate matter from various pollutants, I don't see how my understanding could be correct. Larry Hockett (Talk) 23:42, 21 September 2020 (UTC)
- Yes it is a specific pollutant and you understand right - cannot find link to "particle" - maybe someone else changed it already
- "Researchers estimate that reducing..." - This reference needs a page number.
- Page number added
- What do you mean by short-range pollution?
- I meant pollution which is not "long-range". But unfortunately the article about the Convention on Long-Range Transboundary Air Pollution does not seem to have the official definition of "long-range". I think rather than me coming up with my own definition of "short-range" that article should explain how the treaty defines "long-range". I don't know whether Armenia has ratified the treaty but as the power plant mentioned above is 16 km from the border I assume that would be "short-range".
- When I say "What do you mean?", my point is actually that the reader might not know what you mean. Explain it to the reader, not just to me. Where does the article discuss the treaty's definition of long-range? Larry Hockett (Talk) 23:42, 21 September 2020 (UTC)
- Simplified to read "Pollution can affect neighbouring countries." with a cite.
- When I say "What do you mean?", my point is actually that the reader might not know what you mean. Explain it to the reader, not just to me. Where does the article discuss the treaty's definition of long-range? Larry Hockett (Talk) 23:42, 21 September 2020 (UTC)
- I meant pollution which is not "long-range". But unfortunately the article about the Convention on Long-Range Transboundary Air Pollution does not seem to have the official definition of "long-range". I think rather than me coming up with my own definition of "short-range" that article should explain how the treaty defines "long-range". I don't know whether Armenia has ratified the treaty but as the power plant mentioned above is 16 km from the border I assume that would be "short-range".
- "Turkish national electric car" - The linked WP article says there are two such cars, not one.
- Amended
- Reference #3 is another huge document and needs a page number.
- Amended so link does not go directly to doc (I have been told this elsewhere) - the 7.9% figure is on the webpage which we link to which then links to doc
Sources of air pollution
[edit]- In general, there is very little information about each topic in this section. Surely we can find more information about, for example, traffic and pollution in Turkey.
- I have added a bit more generally but I would like to have subsections for particular cities, if @Editoneer: does not object, because they are different: one obvious example being that Ankara is far from the sea but there are other differences I would like to expand on.
- Okay for now. Add a source for Turkish coal being low-quality and one for the popularity of wood-burning stoves.
- Done
- Okay for now. Add a source for Turkish coal being low-quality and one for the popularity of wood-burning stoves.
- I have added a bit more generally but I would like to have subsections for particular cities, if @Editoneer: does not object, because they are different: one obvious example being that Ankara is far from the sea but there are other differences I would like to expand on.
- "Increased car ownership" - Increased over what? Are you saying that more Turkish people own cars now than at some point in the past?
- Yes - more than at any point in the past
- "frequent urban smog conditions" - The reference doesn't really mention smog; it definitely doesn't mention frequency of smog.
- Amended and also picture caption to say that the smog it shows is "early 21st century"
- Page number for the source for "would have many benefits".
- Done
- "high-speed" should have a hyphen; countermeasure usually isn't hyphenated.
- Done
- Residential Heating - lowercase H in the heading. Elaborate on how Turkish coal is unique or why it is bad.
- Both are highly detailed and cited in the coal in Turkey article so I don't want to duplicate too much - I just wrote here that it is low quality - if I should say more (perhaps by an excerpt) or cite it here please let me know.
- "Greenpeace Mediterranean claim" - see WP:SAY.
- Changed "claim"to "say"
- The average reader might not know what "Afşin-Elbistan power plants" are.
- changed to "coal-fired power plants in Afşin-Elbistan" - if they need more they can click the link
- "Since 1st January 2020" - see MOS:BADDATE
- Amended
- In this section and the Types section, there are some acronyms that have not been explained to the reader.
- Linked - if more is needed (e.g. writing chemical names in full) please let me know
- Spell out the names in the prose portions. An abbreviation and a link work fine in infoboxes or tables (where space is limited), but it is very easy to spell out "sulfur dioxide" when you mention it in the prose. Larry Hockett (Talk) 23:42, 21 September 2020 (UTC)
- Done
- Spell out the names in the prose portions. An abbreviation and a link work fine in infoboxes or tables (where space is limited), but it is very easy to spell out "sulfur dioxide" when you mention it in the prose. Larry Hockett (Talk) 23:42, 21 September 2020 (UTC)
- Linked - if more is needed (e.g. writing chemical names in full) please let me know
- Consider linking to flue-gas desulfurization where you mention desulfurisation systems.
- Done
- Why not mention the limits from the EU Industrial Emissions Directive? Why did we choose China for the comparison?
- I thought China also being a middle-income country would be a fairer comparison than the EU high-income countries. But how about if I bolded the Turkey figures in the table and put the China and EU figures right next to them in brackets in red and blue respectively?
- I would explain your comparison to the reader or leave it out. Larry Hockett (Talk) 23:42, 21 September 2020 (UTC)
- Done
- I would explain your comparison to the reader or leave it out. Larry Hockett (Talk) 23:42, 21 September 2020 (UTC)
- I thought China also being a middle-income country would be a fairer comparison than the EU high-income countries. But how about if I bolded the Turkey figures in the table and put the China and EU figures right next to them in brackets in red and blue respectively?
Types
[edit]- Each item in this section is mentioned only briefly; it is not enough information to satisfy the broadness criterion for GA. Some of the information is begging for expansion, such as when you mention dangerous PM 2.5 levels in several cities but not the names of the cities.
- Done
- Overall in this section, I just do not get a good sense of what causes these types of pollution, what can be done to reduce them, and what effects each type might have.
- I have added a bit more in other parts of this article but am reluctant to duplicate too much that is already in the Air pollution article. But would welcome your further suggestions.
- You don't want to copy and paste, but you should give us enough info for a basic understanding of this problem in Turkey, even if we have not read the more general air pollution article. Larry Hockett (Talk) 23:42, 21 September 2020 (UTC)
- Added a little background.
- You don't want to copy and paste, but you should give us enough info for a basic understanding of this problem in Turkey, even if we have not read the more general air pollution article. Larry Hockett (Talk) 23:42, 21 September 2020 (UTC)
- I have added a bit more in other parts of this article but am reluctant to duplicate too much that is already in the Air pollution article. But would welcome your further suggestions.
Medical dangers
[edit]- There is really nothing medical here other than loss of life and increased risk from respiratory infections.
- Yes but they are both very important
- This looks better except for the part about ambulances mentioned below.
- Yes but they are both very important
- "average excess loss of life (compared to WHO guidelines)" - The average reader is not going to know what this means. Are you saying that there are WHO guidelines to determine the normal loss of life and that Turkey exceeds this threshold?
- Clarified to "average excess loss of life (compared to how many would be lost if WHO air pollution guidelines were followed)"
- "but this will vary by location because, as of 2019, air pollution is severe in some cities." - That's not the reason it varies; that's just another way of saying it varies.
- It is trying to say that a reason loss of life varies by city is because air pollution varies by city - if you or anyone can think of a better wording please suggest or change it directly
Urban
[edit]- This is an unclear heading. Urban what? It looks like this is actually medical information, so maybe just get rid of Urban and continue the previous section.
- Retitled and amended
- "Although improved since the 1990s, as of 2019, measured with the air quality index" - I think you are trying to say that air quality in Istanbul, as measured with the air quality index, improved from the 1990s to 2019. Right? The next sentence can be about the heart/respiratory effects, but don't try to put all that in one sentence.
- Not sure the AQI existed in the 1990s, but you are right it was confusing - split into 2 sentences
- On the cigarette pack comparison, Bursa may be worth mentioning specifically, because it is much higher than 16.
- Done
Economics
[edit]- 2015/16 --> 2015-16
- Done
- "estimated direct costs as 2.5%" - estimated direct costs of what?
- Amended
- "A 2018 study put the health benefits at" - health benefits of what?
- Amended
- Comma between fuels and greenhouse
- Done
- Consider linking co-benefit to co-benefits of climate change mitigation.
- Done
- How do the last couple of sentences relate to economics? We have to connect the dots for the reader.
- Moved to another section
External Resources
[edit]- The standard heading here is External links.
- Done
Overall, my view is that a lot of work is going to be required to reach GA standards, but I think we should leave the review open for another week to allow the nominator or others to address my concerns. Some of my items are minor and easy to fix, but a couple of sections will require expansion, which is more time-consuming. If the article cannot be brought up to the standards in a week or two, maybe we should consider closing this review and allowing the nominator to work on the article at his or her leisure. Thanks to the nominator and the reviewer for their work here. Larry Hockett (Talk) 07:55, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
And this is the reason why I don't straight-away give it the standard, I do agree with all of the things from the list. Editoneer (talk) 18:36, 14 September 2020 (UTC)
- Editoneer, the GA process is inherently subjective and I appreciate your willingness to ask for a second opinion. Larry Hockett (Talk) 11:59, 15 September 2020 (UTC)
- Editoneer Larry Hockett Thanks for your useful comments. I have made some changes. What else, if anything, do I need to do please? Chidgk1 (talk) 10:51, 20 September 2020 (UTC)
- Chidgk1, I will take another look when I can sit down and give it my undivided attention, which will hopefully be this evening. Larry Hockett (Talk) 09:46, 21 September 2020 (UTC)
- Sorry for bare urls in most recently added info - for some reason visual editor seems to be unavailable at certain times of day - I should be able to use visual editor autocite to tidy them up shortly Chidgk1 (talk) 13:42, 21 September 2020 (UTC)
New issues
- Why is there a Summary section after the lead section? The lead is the summary of the article.
- Oops that was meant to be temporary to make sure I did not lose any refs which were formerly in the lead but I forgot to dissolve it. Moved sentences to right places.
- The history section makes more sense early in the article, not at the end. There are long gaps in the history.
- I have expanded it a little but I don't think the history is important, so in my opinion having a very short section at the end is enough as I am not intending to get this article to featured standard in future.
- The added material about electric ambulances doesn't fit in a discussion of medical dangers (which are death or illness associated with pollution). Also, you are using synthesis to put material together from multiple sources to make a point that no source makes by itself; at least two of the three sources themselves are not great (probably WP:PRIMARY).
- Removed
Thank you for allowing me to clarify some of my feedback and for working to address it. Larry Hockett (Talk) 23:42, 21 September 2020 (UTC)
Thanks
[edit]- Editoneer Unless you or Larry Hockett have any more useful suggestions I guess the decision is yours to make now Chidgk1 (talk) 09:18, 22 September 2020 (UTC)
- As it stands, it would be a no-go from me due to the unaddressed feedback and the persistence of apparently unsourced statements. Larry Hockett (Talk) 12:29, 22 September 2020 (UTC)
- By unaddressed feedback do you just mean my refusal to do any more on the "history" section or was there another comment of yours I did not deal with properly? Apart from the lead (which as you say should just summarize stuff already cited elsewhere) there are other sentences without cites - some of them I considered too obvious to cite, but it may well be that I am too close to the subject and have missed things which really do need either citing or removing. If you have time to "cite bomb" any such statements with "citation needed" or similar tags that would make sure I do not miss any. Chidgk1 (talk) 17:21, 22 September 2020 (UTC)
- Chidgk1 I added (temporary) bold text to the feedback that seems to be unaddressed. As far as uncited material, what sticks out to me the most is when there is no citation at the end of an entire paragraph. There are a few of those. I realize that the section on passive smoking is only one sentence (one-sentence sections are not great ideas), but the lack of a reference means that the entire topic is unsourced. The smoking situation in Turkey may be obvious to people who live there, but a source is helpful for people who don't. Larry Hockett (Talk) 00:31, 23 September 2020 (UTC)
- Larry Hockett Oh yes sorry I had not noticed you had replied to my replies. Thanks for spending time on this. Have done a little more but as it is such a depressing subject I think I will stop now. If it does not pass I might come back to it next year, or maybe someone reading this would like to continue improving it. Up to you now Editoneer
- Larry Hockett, I believe now it meets the standards, do you agree? Editoneer (talk) 18:19, 23 September 2020 (UTC)
- Editoneer, I went through and did a little copyediting, and I think the article has improved since the start of this review, and though I still have some concerns, I feel like (of the three of us collaborating on this process) I am potentially being the mean one here. With that in mind, and trying to maintain a balance of what the GA criteria are and what they are not, I'll explain my concerns and leave the final determination up to you.
- As I was doing spot checks of sources, as we should do before promotion to GA, I found what is currently ref #23. It probably stuck out to me because it is a bare URL, but that's not the problem. (WP:GANOT suggests that bare URLs are okay as long as the source can be identified in some way.) I just question whether this site has the editorial oversight to qualify as a reliable source (as inline citations for GAs must be to reliable sources), and even if it does, I don't see anything about buildings or rural areas (the info this source is supposed to support).
- Oops - have changed cite now. Chidgk1 (talk) 06:17, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
- A similar issue comes up with what is currently ref #9. The passage implies that wood-burning stoves, which are used in bakeries, are significant contributors to pollution in Turkey. The source only mentions their use in one bakery, and there is no mention of pollution as far as I can see.
- Qualified the statement. Chidgk1 (talk) 06:17, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
- I provided feedback earlier on clarifying the use of Turkish national electric car when the WP entry specifies that there are two such cars in the works. The nominator responded Amended, but it looks like this remains unaddressed, actually in two places. (I would be open to explanation as to why this shouldn't be amended, but it makes me concerned that it was handled this way.)
- Carelessness on my part probably - have now amended
- I can understand that it is difficult for a nominator to return again and again to articles on certain topics. I hate to get this far and not promote this, and one option is for reviewers to fix certain issues themselves. In fact, as I'm reviewing this now, I see that we have the wrong cigarette pack comparison in the Cities section (16 packs in Istanbul but 38 packs in Bursa) and I can fix that myself. I wasn't able to fix the other sourcing issues above myself, but you might be able to. Larry Hockett (Talk) 23:11, 23 September 2020 (UTC)
- Larry Hockett, I believe now it meets the standards, do you agree? Editoneer (talk) 18:19, 23 September 2020 (UTC)
- Larry Hockett Oh yes sorry I had not noticed you had replied to my replies. Thanks for spending time on this. Have done a little more but as it is such a depressing subject I think I will stop now. If it does not pass I might come back to it next year, or maybe someone reading this would like to continue improving it. Up to you now Editoneer
- Chidgk1 I added (temporary) bold text to the feedback that seems to be unaddressed. As far as uncited material, what sticks out to me the most is when there is no citation at the end of an entire paragraph. There are a few of those. I realize that the section on passive smoking is only one sentence (one-sentence sections are not great ideas), but the lack of a reference means that the entire topic is unsourced. The smoking situation in Turkey may be obvious to people who live there, but a source is helpful for people who don't. Larry Hockett (Talk) 00:31, 23 September 2020 (UTC)
- By unaddressed feedback do you just mean my refusal to do any more on the "history" section or was there another comment of yours I did not deal with properly? Apart from the lead (which as you say should just summarize stuff already cited elsewhere) there are other sentences without cites - some of them I considered too obvious to cite, but it may well be that I am too close to the subject and have missed things which really do need either citing or removing. If you have time to "cite bomb" any such statements with "citation needed" or similar tags that would make sure I do not miss any. Chidgk1 (talk) 17:21, 22 September 2020 (UTC)
- As it stands, it would be a no-go from me due to the unaddressed feedback and the persistence of apparently unsourced statements. Larry Hockett (Talk) 12:29, 22 September 2020 (UTC)
- Editoneer Unless you or Larry Hockett have any more useful suggestions I guess the decision is yours to make now Chidgk1 (talk) 09:18, 22 September 2020 (UTC)
- @Editoneer, Larry Hockett, and Chidgk1: Just checking on the status of this. It seems to have stalled. AIRcorn (talk) 22:58, 22 October 2020 (UTC)
- @Editoneer, Larry Hockett, and Aircorn: Sorry - for some reason I had not noticed the September comments even though this is on my watchlist - hope everything is OK now - if not please ping me. Chidgk1 (talk) 06:17, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
- @Chidgk1, Editoneer, and Aircorn: - I'm happy to take another look at this over the weekend. I am glad that the nominator has returned to the entry. Larry Hockett (Talk) 08:48, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
- Cool. Thats the best scenario. Hope you can reach a good conclusion here. AIRcorn (talk) 09:25, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
- @Chidgk1, Editoneer, and Aircorn: - I'm happy to take another look at this over the weekend. I am glad that the nominator has returned to the entry. Larry Hockett (Talk) 08:48, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
Finishing off
[edit]Chidgk1, thanks for your continued work on this entry. I think it is getting pretty close to GA standards. One thing sticks out to me. Under Sources of air pollution, the sourcing for burning wood is still weak. I think you should just remove the mention of wood for two reasons: 1) It's hard for me to imagine a modern country that doesn't burn wood, so it's hardly groundbreaking news, and 2) The cited source is about the author visiting a bakery, and such a source cannot be used to support the known or unknown environmental effects of burning wood. The author doesn't get into (and isn't qualified to get into) the environmental impact of burning wood.
I'll do some copyediting, but other than that, I think we're pretty close. Larry Hockett (Talk) 02:29, 26 October 2020 (UTC)
- Larry Hockett OK I have removed that sentence as you are right the source is weak. If coal burning is banned in cities in future perhaps it will then become clear whether wood burning is a significant source of pollution or not. In some other countries there are restrictions. In the UK, for example, only dry (seasoned) wood is allowed to be sold for burning. Chidgk1 (talk) 06:10, 26 October 2020 (UTC)
- Thank you for addressing that. Let's wrap this up in the GA criteria table below. Larry Hockett (Talk) 07:52, 26 October 2020 (UTC)
Rate | Attribute | Review Comment |
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1. Well-written: | ||
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | The nominator worked hard during the review process to address issues that fell under this criterion. | |
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | The lead summarizes the body. | |
2. Verifiable with no original research: | ||
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | ||
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | The nominator remedied a few sourcing issues during the review process. | |
2c. it contains no original research. | ||
2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. | Earwig's tool has been down for me this weekend, but I have spot checked many of the references and used Google Search to manually detect copyvio issues. I have found nothing of concern. | |
3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | ||
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | ||
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | ||
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | ||
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | All images have appropriate license descriptions. | |
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | ||
7. Overall assessment. | Good work on a tough topic. Passing. Larry Hockett (Talk) 08:09, 26 October 2020 (UTC) |
Oh god, I've been slacking, so everything here seems to be done and Larry seems to be willing to pass this article, I agree with that. Good job both of you. Editoneer (talk) 19:30, 30 October 2020 (UTC)