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Reviewer: Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk · contribs) 12:17, 9 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Beginning review. Will add comments over the next several days. Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk) 12:24, 9 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

A couple of instances of copyvio need to be addressed in the "Early life" section.

  • "a mansion donated by Carl Jacobsen, the heir to Carlsberg breweries, to be used as an honorary residence by the Dane who had made the most prominent contribution to science, literature or the arts." is slightly rephrased from this source
  • "Bohr arrived there in October 1943, and then flew to Britain on a de Havilland Mosquito operated by British Overseas Airways Corporation. The Mosquitos were unarmed high-speed bomber aircraft that had been converted to carry small, valuable cargoes or important passengers. By flying at high speed and high altitude, they could cross German-occupied Norway, and yet avoid German fighters. Bohr, equipped with parachute, flying suit and oxygen mask, spent the three-hour flight lying on a mattress in the aircraft's bomb bay" comes from the same source as above
After fixing the above issues, you can re-check this article using Earwig's Copyvio Detector
Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk) 12:58, 9 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
OK. Copying from Wikipedia happens a lot. :-) Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk) 21:55, 9 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

A couple of DABs and a dead link that has to be researched...

The lede quotes from the Nobel awards page, but I can't figure out Aage Bohr's individual contributions as distinguished from those of Ben Mottelson and James Rainwater from the rather laconic summary. Could you expand the lede just a little so that it can be read apart from the rest of the article? Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk) 22:30, 9 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hans Bohr, Erik Bohr, and Sortedam Gymnasium are, admittedly, significant enough in Denmark to merit their own wiki pages, but for English-language speakers, I feel that this represents overlinking. Even on the Danish Wikipedia, the corresponding articles are hardly more than stubs. Having famous relatives or being a school that a famous person attended are not usually significant to grant notability. Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk) 23:27, 9 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Some awkward or unclear phrases:

Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk) 23:42, 9 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]