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GA Review

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Reviewer: Adog (talk · contribs) 03:44, 31 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will claim this one, and this will be my final review for the August 2023 GAN drive. I could review more articles here-and-there after, but I will take the needed snooze from reviewers after this. I will complete it today, August 31. Adog (TalkCont) 03:44, 31 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]


You know the drill!

Prose

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Lead

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  • The Willoughby and Lawrence Street elevations of the facade are each divided vertically into three bays and are highly similar in design may be simply stated as The Willoughby and Lawrence Street facade elevations are divided vertically into three bays and are highly similar in design.
  • The New York and New Jersey Telephone Company decided to construct 81 Willoughby Street in 1896 in response to increases in its business could be written as The New York and New Jersey Telephone Company constructed 81 Willoughby Street in 1896 in response to increased business.
  • The company sold off the building in 1943, and the building has remained a commercial structure ever since, ... "and the building" could be replaced with "which" to reduce repetition.

Site

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Architecture

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Facade

  • At the easternmost section of the Willoughby Street elevation is an additional, narrow bay without ornament, which is clad almost entirely in brick. "which is" may not be needed here as extra words.

Ground story

  • These piers support the entablature which contains the words "Telephone Building". Possible comma needed before "which" for pause.
  • A recessed service entrance is located to the right of the main entrance, within the easternmost, narrow bay. may be phrased as A recessed service entrance is located within the easternmost, narrow bay to the right of the main entrance.
  • blocks of limestone to limestone blocks?
  • The corner of Lawrence and Willoughby Streets contains a stoop with metal balustrades, which leads up to a glass door. "which leads" to "leading"?
  • All of the other openings on the ground story ... Omit "of" as unnecessary?

Upper stories

  • Each of the three main bays on Lawrence and Willoughby Streets, as well as the curved corner, contains three windows per floor. may read better as Each of the three main bays on Lawrence and Willoughby Streets and the curved corner contains three windows per floor.
  • On the fifth and sixth stories, each of the three primary bays on Lawrence and Willoughby Streets are flanked by a pair of engaged columns may read better as On the fifth and sixth stories, a pair of engaged columns flanked each of the three primary bays on Lawrence and Willoughby Streets.
  • ... the center pane is topped by a keystone, and the entire arch contains ornate moldings. might read better as ... a keystone tops the center pane, and the entire arch contains ornate moldings
  • On the eighth story, each of the primary bays contains three windows ... "contains" here could be "includes" to reduce repetition with the previous sentence.

Interior

  • These concrete walls support a grillage, from which the beams in the superstructure ascend. May not need comma pause here.
  • ... "Columbian fireproof" slabs,[9][12] The building contained ... Punctuation here?
  • Air was drawn down the shaft to the basement, where it passed through several filters, then was supplied to the offices inside the building via fans and ducts might read better as Air was drawn down the shaft to the basement, passing through several filters, and then was supplied to the offices inside the building via fans and ducts.
  • Wikilink "hello girls" to Hello Girls?

History

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Development

Use as telephone office

  • The New York Telephone Company filed plans in November 1920 for the construction of an eight-story annex between Bridge and Lawrence Streets "for the construction of" to simply "to construct"?

Subsequent use

  • The Times described the building as being occupied by nonprofit organizations, as well as doctors' and dentists' offices. Should the New York Times be written out here as is in the next paragraph?

References

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The read and skim-through was very good. Onto spot checks and final write-ups.

Additional comments or concerns

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  • MOS:DUPLINKs, "oculus" in "Upper stories". "Telephone exchange" in "Development". "Downtown Brooklyn" in "Subsequent use".
  • Spot check: According to this source, the sentence "Limestone was used on the first four stories," should instead be the first and second stories, unless the other source contradicts this one or I am miss reading this source. I would double-check as I do not have access to the matching source.
    • I've changed this to "lower stories". From what I've seen, and from images of the building, the first four stories are made of the same material (though this isn't explicitly mentioned in the sources). Epicgenius (talk) 16:47, 1 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Well written + verifiability

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The article is well written, outside of a few corrections or suggestions. The article follows the general manual of style for buildings. The article cites a variety of reliable sources, with a proper reference section. In terms of spot checks, mostly good with the exception of one source. Other than that, all good. In terms of Earwig, there are some spots highlighted I would take a look at, such as the first source; which, although has common phrases, there are some matches in close paraphrasing that should be reworded, or this one. I would go through the top ones and reword the highlighted phrases to better conform with paraphrasing. Adog (TalkCont) 22:16, 31 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Broadness + focus + neutral

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The article is broad in scope, covering a variety of topics for the subject. The article is also focused, with no problems with its content. The article is neutral towards its subject matter. Adog (TalkCont) 21:28, 31 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Images + stability

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The article has images that help illustrate the subject matter, some even taken by the main editor (awesome job). The images' paperwork is properly filed with the Wiki-authorities. The article is stable, with no active or ongoing edit conflicts or disputes. Adog (TalkCont) 21:28, 31 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.