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Reviewer: Kpgjhpjm (talk · contribs) 16:23, 4 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Let us start this GA review . Kpgjhpjm 16:23, 4 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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@MWright96: It's late night in my time zone , I will review the rest of the article tomorrow . Kpgjhpjm 17:09, 4 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Background and preparation

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1st paragraph

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  • Please change Coming into the race from Long Beach 3 weeks earlier. to After winning the previous round at Long Beach 3 weeks earlier , Kpgjhpjm 03:07, 5 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Please change and Jerome D Ambrosio for Dragon had seven points less in the battle for the position. to , seven ahead of Jerome D Ambrosio of Dragon in the battle for third position . Kpgjhpjm 05:35, 5 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Second Paragraph

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  • No issues

Third Paragraph

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  • No issues

Fourth Paragraph

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  • No real issues , but I will be making a few tweaks .

Practice and Qualifying

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First Paragraph

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Second Paragraph

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  • No issues

Third Paragraph

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  • No issues

Fourth Paragraph

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Fifth Paragraph

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Race

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This is the section with problems in many Motorsports articles .

First Paragraph

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  • When the race started . Remove the word when and capitalise T in the .

Second Paragraph

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  • Remove the word Nevertheless
  • A tweaks will be made by me here .

Third Paragraph

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  • In the previous paragraph , it is stated that Buemi and Turvey were battling for fifth place , so when Buemi passed Turvey, he moved into fifth . So when he passed Sarrazin , that move should be for fourth .
  • Please fix this - if di Grassi was leading , Vergne second , Bird third , and as per above sentence Buemi fourth , then where did Prost come from .

Fourth Paragraph

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  • Change due to the tight track to due to the tightness of the track .
  • Change used FanBoost to used his FanBoost - he can' use the FanBoost of others .

Fifth Paragraph

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  • No issues

Post-Race

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  • No issues

Classification

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  • Question : Why are names of some drivers in bold ?

Comments

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  • On-hold for now , @MWright96: On these issues are fixed , I will take a final look and then promote the article. The issues in the Race section's third paragraph are very important ,So please take some time to fix them . When you are done , please ping me . Kpgjhpjm 12:54, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
@MWright96: Looks like all issues are fixed . Taking a final look . Kpgjhpjm 13:34, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
@MWright96: It's see no more issues , passing . Kpgjhpjm 13:42, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]