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Reviewer: Z105space (talk · contribs) 19:14, 21 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I shall review this article. Comments will appear soon. Z105space (talk) 19:14, 21 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

General

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  • Lewis Hamilton, Max Verstappen, Nico Hülkenberg and Marcus Ericsson are wikilinked more than once in the article.
 Done
  • For Carlos Sainz Jr, the word Jr. is not required after the first instance as there is no need to disambiguate.
 Done

Infobox

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  • "Sochi Autodrom, Adlersky City District, Sochi, Krasnodar Krai, Russia" - Overlink is present here. Consider delinking Russia.
 Done

Lead

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  • "The race, contested over fifty-three laps," - The fifty-three lap race.
 Done

Background

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  • "with drivers able to drive fast lap times all through the race on a one-stop strategy." - record?
 Done
  • "in accordance with Rossi's five-race contract that sees him sit out this race and Abu Dhabi." - Reword to the past tense and I believe it would be better if Abu Dhabi should be spelt as the Abu Dhabi Grand Prix.
 Done

Free practice

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  • "two 1.5-hour sessions on Friday" - 1.5 hour should be replaced by 90-minute.
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  • "all three session" - typo in the word session.
 Done

Qualifying

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  • "Manor Marussias" - This should be either Manor Marussia cars or drivers.
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  • "Force Indias" - ditto.
 Done

Race

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  • "while Hamilton was extending his lead over second placed Bottas." - Should be "while Hamilton extended his lead over Bottas".
Past-progressive form should be correct here since it describes actions "going on at a certain time in the past", which is the case here. While Hamilton extends his lead, Maldonado moves ahead of Button.
I see the point raised.
  • "retaining his lead without incidents." - incident.
 Done
  • DRS should be spelt out with the acronym in brackets.
 Done

Post-race

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  • "Speaking about his accident in the race," - It should be "After his accident on lap 12,"
I do not quite understand why one is better than the other?
The sentence has repetition of the word "spoke" and its other form "speaking" twice, and it would be better to be worded as "After his accident on lap 12". Feel free to disagree with my view.

References

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  • No dead links.

That's all I could find. On hold until the above issues have been rectified. Z105space (talk) 19:10, 28 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Z105space: Thank you for another review! Two issues above are still up for debate, but shouldn't be too hard to get out of the way :) Zwerg Nase (talk) 11:52, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Z105space: Sorry, completely overlooked the speak/spoke thing. Good call! Fixed now. Zwerg Nase (talk) 12:46, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Zwerg Nase: I can now pass this article's nomination. Z105space (talk) 12:56, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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