Talk:2012 Summer Olympics opening ceremony/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jennie--x (talk · contribs) 10:45, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Initial Comments

Lead

The statement "Prior to London 2012 there had been considerable apprehension about Britain’s ability to stage an opening ceremony that would reach the standard set by the Beijing Summer Games in 2008" needs referencing. Although it is understood from the sources that Beijing's opening ceremony was thought of being as spectacular, there is no indication of there being considerable apprehension about Britain's efforts. Done

Preparations

"The London Organising Committee of the Olympic and Paralympic Games (LOCOG) selected Danny Boyle as the director of the ceremony." This needs a citation. Done
Ref #19 does not provide a correct citation. Done
The last sentence of the lead (The ceremony was also remarkable for its use of children...) and paragraph 2 of the Preparations section (In preparing the ceremony Boyle gave significant emphasis to the London 2012 theme 'inspire a generation'...) both say the same thing, but don't provide referencing. The use of 'remarkable' (without citation) is a peacock term. Done

Thanks for these comments! I have added references for the prior concerns about being able to match Beijing, a reference for Boyle's appointment, and for Inspire a Generation being the 2005 bid theme (and re-worded to remove the offending word). IanB2 (talk) 14:13, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much! Jennie | ☎ 14:57, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I've replaced Ref #19 (now Ref #24 due to the inserted refs) with another that provides the citation IanB2 (talk) 17:05, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks again! Jennie | ☎ 17:17, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Officials and guests

Done

Proceedings

Second to the right... - The sentence "A celebration of children's literature by British authors began with J. K. Rowling reading a section from J. M. Barrie's Peter Pan" could possibly be made clearer. Is it a celebration of British authors? Or a celebration by British authors? The segment wasn't really a celebration of British authors (more Children's literature), and the segment only featured one author so it can't really be a celebration by authors. Done

Agree. I've made a couple of changes, firstly to make clear that the sequence was a two-part celebration (NHS, moving onto children's books), and then to split the sentence here into two. I've said "children's books" rather than "British children's books" but by this point in the article the "British" bit can perhaps be taken as read? IanB2 (talk) 17:23, 24 August 2012 (UTC

I'd say British can be taken as read. Thanks. Jennie | ☎ 19:23, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Welcome - There is a "Citation needed" tag on a statement that may be considered challenging. Can this be cited? Done

That was mine - I've read a LOT about the ceremony and not seen the suggestion that the nameplates were based on old railway ones anywhere. The editor added this in a couple of times so I added the tag hoping s/he would be able to support it. I suspect this may be a personal judgement from a railway enthusiast that can't be supported by citation, so I've edited it out again IanB2 (talk) 17:23, 24 August 2012 (UTC) p.s. looking at a close-up photo, they are reasonably distinctive and I've a feeling the fact may be correct. It's a shame we can't source it IanB2 (talk) 17:46, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll tag this as not done for now and try and look for a source. Thanks. Jennie | ☎ 19:23, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Update: I couldn't find anything either! This would go against the guidelines of using original research, but it is a shame that there is no source available - it's an interesting fact. Jennie | ☎ 19:33, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The sentence that follows the Citation needed tag, "who was wearing a dress made entirely from fabric printed with photos of people who had applied to be 2012 Olympic volunteers.", needs either sourcing or removing as it could be challenged. Done

This one is definitely true. I've added a ref IanB2 (talk) 17:23, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks again. Jennie | ☎ 19:23, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Let the Games Begin - "This was a break with tradition as the Flag had previously been carried only by athletes." - Needs sourcing. Done

I've taken this out as have been unable to source it. IanB2 (talk) 18:26, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

It's a difficult thing to claim - especially seeing as the further in the past the games, the less information Wikipedia (and the internet in general) seem to hold on them. Jennie | ☎ 19:23, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

There Is A Light That Never Goes Out - "(the petals will accompany each team home after the Games)" - Needs sourcing. Done

Done IanB2 (talk) 18:26, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. Jennie | ☎ 19:23, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reviews

Done

TV coverage

"The BBC's coverage was the most-watched televised event of the year in the United Kingdom, averaging approximately 24.24 million viewers, and peaking at approximately 26.9 million viewers." - Statistics need sourcing. Done

Done IanB2 (talk) 18:26, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. Jennie | ☎ 19:23, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

It has to be said that the much criticised commentary was forced upon *all* TV viewers using regular Digital Terrestrial services and Freeview. A commentary-free version was available on Satellite but it was *not* available on the BBC Red Button (despite some people's assurances to the contrary). Ant501UK (talk) 12:54, 27 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Music

Done

Technical aspects

"as well as 7,346 square metres (1.815 acres) of turf including crops." - Statistics need sourcing.

Done IanB2 (talk) 18:26, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

There is a citation tag in this section that needs taking care of also. Done

This contribution was added by someone who (from the way it was originally worded) I am guessing was a technical volunteer, so doubt it can be sourced independently. I've removed the detail of how the volunteers were organised since this isn't really important as far as the ceremony is concerned IanB2 (talk) 18:26, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. Jennie | ☎ 19:23, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ceremony key team

Done

References

Done

Overall Summary

I've placed the article on hold for now. There seems to be an issue with the fair-use rationale of the image used in the "Let the Games Begin" section. Could editors ensure that the image has valid and free use claims? It seems like the image went under discussion as to whether to keep or delete, in either case, editors need to remove the "deletion notice" or the picture (depending on the outcome of the discussion). Thanks. Jennie | ☎ 17:27, 25 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The outcome was to keep - I have removed the deletion tag. Thanks and congrats, 2012 Summer Olympics opening ceremony has passed to GA status! Jennie | ☎ 16:21, 26 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Jennie for all your hard work checking and reviewing! IanB2 (talk) 20:51, 26 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review Final Summary
It is reasonably well written. a (prose): Y b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): Y It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): Y b (citations to reliable sources): Y c (no original research): Y It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): Y b (focused): Y It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: Y It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: Y It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): Y b (suitable captions): Y
Overall: Pass/Fail: Pass
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