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Reviewer: Good888 (talk · contribs) 11:36, 17 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Might as well review another NASCAR article. good888 (talk) 11:36, 17 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Lead section

  • "Chevrolet maintained its lead in the Manufacturers' Championship, twenty-seven ahead of Toyota and sixty-three ahead of Ford, with twelve races remaining in the season." I will add how many they were ahead of Dodge too.

Report

  • "Denny Hamlin was third in the Drivers' Championship with 3,047 points in a Chevrolet" Not too sure we need to know he was in a Chevrolet. I suggest removing that.
  • "Six drivers did not qualify because one team withdrew from qualifying." Which team?
  • "The race was preempted in Southeast Michigan due to that year's Woodward Dream Cruise, broadcast on Scripps-owned WXYZ-TV in Southfield, Michigan." Scripps Media is a red link. Did you mean Scripps Networks Interactive?
  • Who are Ruth Graham and Delwyn Thorton?
  • "After twenty-nine laps, Robby Gordon and Michael McDowell had driven to the garage." Reason why?
  • "On lap 65, Kasey Kahne received drive-through penalty after driving too fast on pit lane." A drive-through penalty you mean.
  • "Also during the accident, Tony Raines collided in the back of Stewart's race car." I would remove the word also from this sentence.
  • "On lap 192, Scott Speed had a tire to deflate, prompting the fourth caution." Rewrite to: "On lap 192, one of Scott Speed's tires deflated, prompting the fourth caution"
  • "On lap 371, Sam Hornish, Jr. drove toward pit lane." Not too sure if this is notable enough. I would remove this.
  • "Kyle Busch won the race, leading a race high of 282 laps." I would change this a bit. I suggest noting that he made history.

Results

  • I think you were trying to link Gunselman Motorsports in the qualifying sub-section?
  • Yes, I always miss one...

I will promote once the issues above are addressed. good888 (talk) 11:36, 17 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

 Done with all, thanks again for your reviews. --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 14:00, 17 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Good job. Promoting to GA class. good888 (talk) 16:14, 17 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
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