Talk:2000 San Marino Grand Prix

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Review: September 3, 2024. (Reviewed version).

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GA Review

Passed. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 06:32, 3 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Nominator: EnthusiastWorld37 (talk · contribs) 20:27, 11 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 04:02, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article. I'll note upfront that if you disagree/don't understand my comment, push back/ask. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 04:02, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Leaving some initial comments below.

Apologies for the delay here. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 10:59, 2 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

All done Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 11:23, 2 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose and content

Formula One World Championship, and the season's Remove the comma, per WP:CINS
run four laps longer than Häkkinen during his second stint. step this out so it is clearer for a lay reader, given it is the lede.
I would like to see it mentioned mentioned in the lede who ultimately won the 2000 Formula One World Championship to give a full context for the race, although I understand if this is not normal practice for articles of this type.
- This is not standard practice for articles at GA level EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 20:21, 27 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
practiced starts for durability purposes could you explain this to me?
shookdown link shakedown (testing)
while McLaren scored no points due to their unreliable car, and driver David Coulthard was disqualified better use of conjunctions, as it appears Coulthard was on a separate team to McLaren.
possible world championship victory,[21] but Ferrari improvements different conjunction, inappropriate SYNTH, implications for Schumacher celebrating a possible world championship victory
admitted WP:SAID
with a concentration on active voice for concision

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 04:02, 22 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Rollinginhisgrave: Have made changes based on the above points EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 20:21, 27 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

BAR car failed due to a ~~fuel leak caused by a~~ failed fuel pipeline, dropping oil over the track
with a low chance of rain don't need to mention this unless the weather changes through the day.
mechanicsm sp
pushed too hard can you be more clear on this
he had to slow for yellow flags why was this?
the fastest driver to miss the top ten due to -> after too much detail
and costing him time rmv
For the last 15 minutes,[49] Button selected the medium compound tyres but being unacquainted with the track following hydraulic issues earlier in the day and him forcing himself to mount the kerbs left him in 18th. does this sentence make sense?
in the hopes of improving race performance rmv
Massimo Trebbi you don't have to mention the mechanic's name.
but was moved into the pit lane was tense
and his immediate reaction was to aggressively prevent Coulthard wordy, use active voice
Barrichello appeared hesitant to overtake his teammate Michael Schumacher attribute
the former to just use surnames as this gets a bit confusing
while Ralf Schumacher lost momentum... falling from fifth to ninth break up sentence, too long
in a battle for third less colloquial
were battling for ^
.[3][77]As space
factors., adding
but called it better conjunction

Suggestions

Consider linking tifosi

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 10:59, 2 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sources

I notice www.formula1.com seems to have undergone a change in ownership. Can you tell me why this is considered RS?
- This version is before Formula One itself took over the running and maintenance of the website. However, it did have staff members. EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 04:20, 3 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
[7] Y
[14] Y
[21] Y
[28] clock I might be missing it, but I can't really figure out what info you're citing here, and there's a lot of text. Might be best if you can point it out.
- I am primarily citing the text that states the format of the race, particularly practice, qualifying and warm-up EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 04:20, 3 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
[35] Y
[42] Y
[49a] Y
[56] Y
[70] Y
[80] Y

Other

Neutral Y
No COPYVIO/OR Y 74.2% earwig, all quotes
Broad / summary style Y
Stable Y
Images: appropriately tagged PD, CC Y

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 11:23, 2 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Rollinginhisgrave: Have made further amendments to the article based on your most recent feedback. Please let me know if I missed anything or is there is something else that needs addressing EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 04:39, 3 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.