Talk:2000 European Grand Prix/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 17:59, 21 March 2020 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this one shortly. Harrias ^talk 17:59, 21 March 2020 (UTC)

Background

• "The McLaren, Sauber, Benetton. Jordan.." Rogue full-stop.
• "Luca Badoer spent three days at the Fiorano Circuit practicing pit stops and testing aerodynamic and mechanical setups of the F1-F2000." Clarity needs to be provided on which team this was for.
• "Coulthard then won the British Grand Prix and Hakkinen the.." Missing the umlaut from Häkkinen. Check if there are any further instances of this.
• "In this sport something weird always happens If I were.." Is this missing some punctuation?

Practice

• "..improved sufficiently in the next 20 minutes." Would this work better as "..improved sufficiently over the next 20 minutes."?
• "..overcast for the two practice sessions on Saturday morning. In the third practice session.." Moving straight from talking about two sessions to talking about the third is slightly confusing, can you make it a little clearer.
• "..Häkkinen, Frentzen, Coulthard, Pedro de la Rosa of the Arrows team. Ralf Schumacher, .." Another full-stop that should be a comma.
• "Verstappen's running was curtailed.." Expand and link Verstappen, this is his first mention.
• "..due to smoke bellowing from his engine.." This should be "billowing", not "bellowing".
• "clouted" isn't encyclopaedic language.
• "..the rest of the top ten composed Villeneuve.." This should either be "top ten was composed of" or "top ten comprised".

Qualifying

• "..with the starting order decided by their fastest laps." It is unclear if this means their starting order in qualifying was decided by their fastest practice laps, or their starting order in the race was decided by their fastest qualifying laps: clarify.

Qualifying classification

• Please use {{flagathlete}} rather than {{flagicon}}, to create (for example) David Coulthard (GBR).
• Use {{sort}} so that the "Driver" column sorts by the driver's surname. (Or, ideally, remove the flags entirely, and use {{sortname}}.)

Warm-up

• "..was nine-thousands of a seconds slower.." Typo, should be "second".
• "..Coulthard,. De La Rosa.." Stray full-stop.

Race

• "Every driver, except the Ferrari cars, Villeneuve and Verstappen, began.." This could be misread that Villeneuve and Verstappen were the Ferrari cars.
• "..attempted to pass on Villeneuve for fifth.." No need for "on".
• "Frentzen retired on lap three with smoke bellowing from.." As above.
• Used like this, "Upfront" is informal; switch to "At the front".
• "..overall fastest lap, a 1 minute and 22.269 seconds as he.." Change to "..overall fastest lap, 1 minute and 22.269 seconds, as he.."
• "On lap 28, Salo's driveshaft failed and a loss of car control beached him in a gravel trap and retired." Add "he" before "retired".
• "Both drivers rejoined in second and fifth." This doesn't make grammatical sense. Perhaps add it onto the previous sentence: "Häkkinen and his teammate Coulthard made their final pit stops on lap 45, and rejoined in second and fifth respectively."

Post-race

"..because they did not elect to risk knowing the wet-weather tyres were slower than the slick dry compounds.." This seems to have got a bit garbled, and doesn't quite say what it means, I think.

General

• Be consistent about whether you capitalise "De La Rosa" / "de la Rosa" / "De la Rosa".

Race classification

• No need for the double daggers, they just add clutter: it is clear whether drivers scored points or not, as it is listed in the "Points" column.
• Please use {{flagathlete}} rather than {{flagicon}}, to create (for example) Michael Schumacher (GER).
• Use {{sort}} so that the "Driver" column sorts by the driver's surname. (Or, ideally, remove the flags entirely, and use {{sortname}}.)

Championship standings after the race

• Same comment regarding the flags.

Images

• All images are appropriately licensed and captioned.
• Consider adding alt text, but it isn't a GA requirement.

References

• No spotchecks carried out, as a trusted nominator.
• References are formatted consistently in an appropriate style.
• All references appear to be to reliable sources.

Lead

• "142,000 spectators attended the event." Avoid starting a sentence with a number.
• "..and the ninth edition of the event as a standalone race." What do you mean by "standalone race" here?

Overall, good solid work, as I've come to expect. Mostly just minor fixes to be made here. Harrias ^talk 14:05, 24 March 2020 (UTC)

• • @Harrias: Have addressed every query except for the {{Sort}} as am confused as to what to do. MWright96 (talk) 16:15, 24 March 2020 (UTC)
    • It looks like you can actually embed the two templates. To be honest, I'm amazed there isn't a template that already does this, but I can't find out. Essentially, {{flagathlete|{{sortname|David|Coulthard}}|UK}} will produce the right result, though I appreciate it's a bit of a ball-ache. While that would be ideal, the article as it is meets the GA standards, so I'm more than happy to sign it off as a GA, and you can choose whether to implement this change or not. Harrias ^talk 20:36, 24 March 2020 (UTC)