Talk:1974–75 Buffalo Braves season/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 05:05, 17 October 2010 (UTC)

I'll review this over the next couple days. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 05:05, 17 October 2010 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:

• "The series went to seven games, however, the Braves lost game 7 115–96 on the road." since you spell game seven out earlier in the sentence, you should later as well. Also, the sentence can be split at However.
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:00, 19 October 2010 (UTC)
• I'd move the transactions section to the top; basically fix the format of the first sections to the other buffalo season article i just reviewed.
  • Moved.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 07:15, 19 October 2010 (UTC)
• "Incoming commissioner, Larry O'Brien announce an" announced.
  • O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:41, 19 October 2010 (UTC)
• "Buffalo boasted high-scoring super star Bob McAdoo. The Big Mac, as he was known, posted a 34.5 scoring average to lead the NBA, making more field goals than any other player." sentences can be combined, nickname not needed.
  • O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:43, 19 October 2010 (UTC)
• "converting a solid 81%." rm a solid, starting to feel informal.
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:45, 19 October 2010 (UTC)
• "40,000 to 467,267" a 10x increase? Doesn't sound right.
  • Notice the by in front.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 07:13, 19 October 2010 (UTC)
• "6th in blocks per game. second in total free throws, and fifth in field goal percentage" shouldn't be variation; either 6th and 5th or sixth and fifth.
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 07:12, 19 October 2010 (UTC)
• MVP can be linked.
  • O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:38, 19 October 2010 (UTC)
• Any memorable games in March/April? When did they clinch a playoff spot? That should at least get noted.
  • I can not find anything other than the 43rd win which set the franchise record. It seems that this might be the night but the article does not mention it. this search did not help. It is possible that they clinched on an off night when someone else lost.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 07:56, 19 October 2010 (UTC)
• What seed were they in the playoffs? Might be good to note.
  • The NBA does not make a big deal of seed. See [1] for example where no seeds are mentioned.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 08:10, 19 October 2010 (UTC)
• "the Braves capture home court" captured.
  • Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 07:01, 19 October 2010 (UTC)
• "Home teams won the remaining games" I'd add the to the start of the sentence.
  • Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 07:03, 19 October 2010 (UTC)
• "A Unseld offensive rebound " might be 'An Unseld'.
  • Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 07:03, 19 October 2010 (UTC)
• "In game 7, Washington jumped to a 28&dnash;13 lead" needs fixing
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 07:05, 19 October 2010 (UTC)

GAN is on hold, you know the drill. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:36, 19 October 2010 (UTC)

Looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 16:36, 19 October 2010 (UTC)