Talk:1963 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1

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Reviewer: Cyclonebiskit (talk · contribs) 18:34, 17 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Dropping a note that I'll be reviewing this article. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 18:34, 17 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

General

I've made modest copyedits to the article. Please make sure to re-read articles that you've written before submitting them to GAN, some of the mistakes I've found are can be found on a cursory pass.
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Lede

It was a below average season in terms of tropical storms... – Near-average is more appropriate given that the sourced average is 9.6 (more in season summary section)

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:18, 18 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

In Bermuda, strong winds resulted in about $300,000 (1963 USD) in damage. – This sentence is completely out of place; either needs to be removed or reworded to flow better from the previous sentence regarding Arlene.

Better?--12george1 (talk) 05:18, 18 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hurricanes Beulah and Debra, as well as an unnamed tropical storm, did not impact land. – Also feels out of place, you're jumping around with storm formation and impacts but lack timing to give flow.

Better?--12george1 (talk) 05:18, 18 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The above suggestions are if you wish to keep the first paragraph of the lede as-is. However, I'd suggest rewording the majority of it to cover the basics of how many storms formed, when the first and last one was, and what the strongest was. The second para can be dedicated to impact, with a sentence or two specifically for Flora.

But half the second paragraph is already dedicated to Flora, plus I've formatted it so the second paragraph begins with mentioning Flora as the most intense of the season. IMO, it sounds better or more exciting than starting the second paragraph with something like "Strong winds from Arlene caused about $300,000 (1963 USD) in damage in Bermuda"--12george1 (talk) 05:18, 18 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Season summary

Section is completely lacking information on synoptic conditions throughout the season, which are described on page one of the Monthly Weather Review

Done--12george1 (talk) 21:35, 13 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

As mentioned earlier, the comparison to average number of storms should be "near-average", same goes for the number of hurricanes as both are approximately ±1 of the average.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:18, 18 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The season's activity was reflected with an accumulated cyclone energy (ACE) rating of 118. – How does this compare to the average?

The 1950-2000 average ACE was 96.1--12george1 (talk) 05:18, 18 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hurricane Beulah

The hurricane turned to the north, where the anticyclone that was favoring development to its south caused unfavorable conditions. – No mention of this anticyclone prior to this statement.

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 05:18, 18 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Beulah weakened to a minimal hurricane and raced to the northeast... – Should probably mention somewhere that brief period of re-intensification on August 26

Better?--12george1 (talk) 05:18, 18 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Tropical Storm Three

You should definitely mention the observation of 78 mph (126 km/h) from the Freiburg on September 12, that observation is why this storm was added to the database.

Done--12george1 (talk) 02:59, 30 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hurricane Cindy

Movement of the storm is needed after you mention its formation as a TS

Done--12george1 (talk) 02:59, 30 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Early the following day, the hurricane weakened to a tropical storm and further to a tropical depression about six hours later. – "[After unspecified time], the hurricane weakened to a tropical storm and further to a tropical depression about six hours [after the unspecified time]."

Done--12george1 (talk) 02:59, 30 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hurricane Debra

Should include that recon reported a radar eye on September 20 (even though it conflicts somewhat with TD status, it's something useful)

Done--12george1 (talk) 21:35, 13 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hurricane Flora

The met history needs to be condensed to a single paragraph; just hit the major points (formation, peak intensity, general path, landfalls, dissipation). Two paragraphs is a bit much when there's a dedicated sub-article.

I'm not good at stuff like this, so Hurricanehink condensed it for me--12george1 (talk) 00:05, 5 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Impact on Trinidad and Tobago should be condensed to one or two sentences (currently five, which is almost the same as Cuba).

One or two sentences is tough. I've gone down to 3--12george1 (talk) 00:05, 5 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

A solid start, but some work is needed for this to be promoted. Putting the review on hold for now. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 20:03, 17 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@12george1: Sorry for the long delay in getting back to you on this. All but two issues have been addressed. The season summary still needs synoptic information from the Monthly Weather Review and the recon tidbit for Debra. Once these are covered, I'll be happy to pass the article. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 20:30, 13 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Nah, I should be apologizing. I got really lazy about fixing these things :P The review is getting close to a month old. I just fixed those two issues.--12george1 (talk) 21:35, 13 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I guess we'll call it even, then

Looks good now, passing the article. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 21:46, 13 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]