Talk:195 Broadway/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 19:51, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"occupies almost an entire city block, occupying the entirety" occupy, entire, occupy, entire...
- Fixed. I did not realize that. This is why it's good to have a second look. epicgenius (talk) 19:48, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
We have an article on First transcontinental telephone call.
- Linked.
"195 Broadway remains in use as" probably could use an "as of 2020" here.
- Done.
"195-207 " en-dash.
- Done.
"who had taken the role at AT&T in " no need to repeat "at AT&T"
- Removed.
" in 1911–1914" never keen on "in" and then a range. Why not "between 1911 and 1914"? A few of these...
- Fixed.
"The Western Union Telegraph Building was.." caption needs a period.
- Done.
"14-18 Dey" en-dash.
"172-174 Fulton Street" likewise.
- Done both.
"195 Broadway is..." image caption needs a period.
- Done.
" indicating changes in its " I would suggest "reflecting" rather than "indicating" here?
- Done.
"1927[26] and of the first transatlantic telephone call, made to London, England, also in 1927.[10][2] " move all refs to the end and order.
- Done.
"to Peter Kalikow" who? context?
- Added.
"the western part of the block back to a hotel.[39] The western part of the block " repetitive.
- Done.
"75 by 77 feet (23 by 23 m)" looks odd when feet are different and metres are same.
- Fixed - I rounded the meters to the nearest 10 cm. epicgenius (talk) 19:48, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"three sets of 4 bays" four.
- Done.
" by Greek Ionic " all previous mentions of Ionic have just be Ionic, is Greek Ionic in this case somehow special?
- Nope, removed. epicgenius (talk) 19:48, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"1,000,000 square feet " I'd be tempted (as it's not precise) to say "a million".
- Done.
"There were formerly 28 elevators serving the office floors.[24] As of 2020, there are " I would merge.
- Done.
"The Millennium Hilton blocks ..." caption needs a period.
- Done.
You also previously used the full title, i.e. Millennium Hilton New York Downtown, so I'd do that here too to avoid any ambiguity.
- Done.
"f loading docks[53] 35 feet (11 m) deep.[65]" horrible ref placement.
- Moved.
"The most famous" touch of POV here, according to whom?
- Well, I didn't add it. So I removed it. epicgenius (talk) 19:48, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" of bronze.[78][71]" order.
- Done.
"notable tenants include:" just drop "notable".
- Done.
Ref 26 spaced hyphen - en-dash please!
- Fixed.

That's it, another cracking article, just a few notes to make it super-smart. On hold. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 18:42, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for another review. I appreciate it. I think we have improved a lot of articles together over the past few days. epicgenius (talk) 19:48, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Good work again. And yes, I think we're getting through some of your backlog! Promoting this now. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 20:43, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]