Talk:1928 Fort Pierce hurricane/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 01:37, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"particularly in coastal regions, were numerous homes were unroofed." - Grammar error; the first "were" should be "where"

Done - Fixed the aforementioned grammatical error. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:45, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"The tropical storm recruved to the north in the gulf, before making a second landfall near Apalachicola, Florida at 0400 UTC on August 10 as a minimal tropical storm with winds of 40 mph (65 km/h)." - Eh, that's kind of a long sentence, plus you use "tropical storm" twice. Cut out the part about it being a minimal tropical storm. So the above sentence becomes: "The tropical storm recruved to the north in the gulf, before making a second landfall near Apalachicola, Florida at 0400 UTC on August 10 with winds of 40 mph (65 km/h)."

Done - Cut out the 'tropical storm' part and adjusted to suggested sentence, also correcting an unmentioned typo (recruved → recurved). TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:45, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Kissimmee area was comparatively less, and was limited to unripened fruit" ----> "unripened fruit" to "unripe fruit"

Done - Took out the unnecessary suffix. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:45, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Initial estimates of property damage in several cities on Florida's mid-eastern coast reached $5 million" ... "A report suggested that damage from those two cities reached at least $1,000,000." - Those two figures would indicate that the Fort Pierce hurricane caused at least $6 million in damage. However, the infobox and the lede say only $235,000. Were these estimates later found to be too high or is the lede and infobox incorrect? Second, "$1,000,000" should be written as "$1 million".

Metadata states $235,000 as a damage total, news sources state $5,000,000, I asked Hink about it earlier, and he told me to stick with the $235,000. I did fix the $1,000,000 though. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:45, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Upon the hurricane's second landfall on the Florida panhandle on August 10, wind effects were much less significant," - Capitalize "Florida panhandle" should be "Florida Panhandle".

Done - Capitalized said word. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:45, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"For any given 50,000 sq mi (130,000 km2) area of land effected by the storm" - Grammar error; "effected" to "affected"

Done - Corrected the grammatical issue. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:45, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

On reference #15, what happened here: "Lyons, Jay Barnes ; foreword by Steve"? I think you mean "Jay Barnes; foreword by Steve Lyons".

Done - It was an error during the auto-fill ISBN process. I did fix up the citation though. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:45, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

On reference #30, "Frankenfield, H.C. (1 August 1928). "Rivers and Floods", that date should be "August 1, 1928". Actually, I doubt that August 1, 1928 is the date. This is because it is for the month of August, so it would have been in September 1928 or later.

Done - I doubt it too, but on all cite-journal DOI auto-fills it fills in the date information as the first of the given release month. I did change the format though. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)}

Wow, that was quick! I am going to pass with article and upgrade it to GA now.--12george1 (talk) 01:48, 29 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]