Talk:1927 World Snooker Championship/GA1

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:09, 30 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"but it is now recognised at the inaugural edition" - typo; should be as
"Ten players entered the competition, including most of the leading billiards players." - Try not to begin a sentence with a number
"The highest break of the tournament was 60, compiled by Albert Cope in his match against Davis." - in what frame was the highest break made?
"It remained the best in the Championship until Davis made a 61 in the 1929 final." - It remained the highest break
Wikilink 1929 final to the relevant article

"in 1924 from professional Tom Dennis had been rebuffed by the BACC's Secretary A. Stanley Thorn," - how about rejected instead?
"Davis drafted the conditions under which a Championship could take place," - the word in bold doesn't need to begin with a capital letter
"The Stanley Thorn, wrote that the decision to promote a professional championship" - don't think that Thorn's actual correct full name
"Gate receipts for each match, after expenses, were to equally shared out between the players concerned." - were to be equally
"Snooker historian Clive Everton wrote that when the professional snooker championship was introduced, "billiards was still very much the premier game, with snooker a sideshow which few were convinced would ever come to much as a public entertainment," and that the early championships received "minimal publicity." - repetition of "championship(s)"
"Ten players entered the championship." - try not to begin a sentence with a number
"had declined to participate in the championship[8]" - a full stop is missing before the reference and after the word "championship"

The Reference column can be deleted and the references put into a table header called "|+1927 World Snooker Championship schedule" or something similiar

Hopefully I've implemented this as suggested - if not, I'll try again. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:21, 30 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"The snooker was played as an added extra to the main event, a billiards match." - snooker game
Wikilink table to billiards table for those unfamiliar with snooker and pockets to the relevant article only on the first mention
"The match started on Monday 29 November 1926 with two sessions per day until Saturday 11 December." - don't think the names of dates are needed
The terms frame and session should be wikilinked to the relevant article only on the first mention
"In the evening session Dennis won the first two frames to win 8–6." - repetition of "won"
"He two more frames in the afternoon to lead 14–5" - He took two
"Cope's 60 break was the highest made in the tournament," - Cope's break of 60
" and in recognition of this Cope later received a commemorative certificate from the BACC." - would receive
1929 final can be linked to 1929 World Snooker Championship
"Like the Inman v Newman match it was played as an added extra to a billiards match." - As with the game between Inman and Newman
"but Dennis won the first two in the evening to win the match 12–10." - repetition of "won" and "match"

"Davis had taken a winning lead by taking frame 23 80–34"- little awkward; can be taking the 23rd frame 80–34
"Davis won four of the seven frames on the final day to win 20–11." - repetition of "won"
"Davis went on to win the World Championship each year until 1940," - every year

"Match results are shown below. Winning players and scores are denoted in bold text.[18][20][22][25][28][33][36][44][51]" - an example of WP:OVERCITE. Think the last citation can be used on the text and the rest of the references be put in the correct places on the draw bracket

As match info and dates are already sourced earlier in the article, I thought it would be better to cut refs down here. The Snooker Scene source has all the results, but not countries, so I looked elsewhere for that and came up against a hiccup I've tried to deal with via efn. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:16, 30 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Done - and corrected the number of object balls. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:36, 30 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 19:18, 30 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for another helpful and comprehensive review, MWright96. Let me know what else needs to be done. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:41, 30 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]