Talk:1859 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1
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Reviewer: Yellow Dingo (talk · contribs) 11:39, 5 September 2016 (UTC)
I'll take this. I should be done reviewing within a day or two. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 11:39, 5 September 2016 (UTC)
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[edit]- Lead
- "with at least 25 boats sinking, with several people drowning after" → it reads weird repeating "with" maybe split into two sentences: "In early October, the sixth cyclone brought damage to Inagua in the Bahamas. At least 25 boats sunk, with several people drowning after one vessel capsized.
- Hurricane 1
- (165 km/h) – equivalent → (165 km/h) which is equivalent
- Hurricane 2
- "Existed in the northwestern Atlantic in the middle of August, the only evidence of the storm was reports from two vessels in the vicinity of bad weather." → "It existed in the northwestern Atlantic in the middle of August with the only evidence of the storm being reports from two vessels in the vicinity of bad weather."
- Hurricane 3
- "winds were estimated" → "winds are estimated"
- Hurricane 4
- Partagás - in the lead you don't have the accent on the "a"; keep it consistent
- "As with the previous hurricane, no track existed for this storm until the 2000 HURDAT," - you say in H3 that the track was developed in 1995
- I think 1995 is correct. There's nothing to indicate in the sources that the track was created in 2000.--12george1 (talk) 21:17, 7 September 2016 (UTC)
- Hurricane 5
- "September 18, newspaper accounts" → "September 18, using newspaper accounts"
- "reemerged" → "re-emerged"
- "into the" → "in the"
- I think that should stay as it is. It would be like saying "I walked into the forest"--12george1 (talk) 21:17, 7 September 2016 (UTC)
- "continued toward the" → "continued towards the"
- "prior passing" → "prior to passing"
- Unlink "Mobile" in the second paragraph as you linked it the first
- "After a wharf was flooded, causing authorities to warn residents to seek higher ground." → "After a wharf was flooded, authorities warned residents to seek higher ground."
- "The trains were" → "The train system was"
- "at least $10,000" → "at least US$10,000"
- "With over" → "With the storm causing over"
- Hurricane 6
- "signalling an intense" → "signalling it was an intense"
- Tropical Storm 7
- "suffered similar a fate" → "suffered a similar fate"
- Hurricane 8
- "reported to near Bermuda" → "reported near Bermuda"
- "peak with winds" → "peak at winds"
- "into extratropical cyclone" → "into an extratropical cyclone"
- General
- In quite a few of the paragraphs you refer to "Category 1" or "Category 2" storms. Normally we spell out numbers 0-9 per MOS:SPELL09. Is there a special reason why you haven't? If not then they should be spelled out. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 07:56, 7 September 2016 (UTC)
- It should stay as "Category 1" or "Category 2". It's similar to things like Magnitude 5 earthquake or F4 tornado.--12george1 (talk) 21:17, 7 September 2016 (UTC)
Final
[edit]Nice work so far. Putting this on hold. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 07:56, 7 September 2016 (UTC)
- @Yellow Dingo: I've fixed or responded to all of the points you raised. Thanks for the review --12george1 (talk) 01:16, 8 September 2016 (UTC)
- Ok nice work; passing. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 05:39, 8 September 2016 (UTC)