Talk:1764 Woldegk tornado/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: WeatherWriter (talk · contribs) 21:01, 19 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Dora the Axe-plorer (talk · contribs) 23:34, 12 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	Violation unlikely (4.8%, no search engine)
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	Article is very focused on the topic
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	Article's history shows no edit wars or major instability. However, @Cocobb8: tagged "more citations needed" though did not elaborate their reasons. The usage definition should not apply to this article per six reference and the article's length seems fine, and "individual unreferenced statements" should be tagged cn. I have not checked for verifiability. Perhaps wrong template used? Cocobb8, if you can explain the reasons for tagging, that would greatly help my review.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	Fine
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Fine
	7. Overall assessment.

Well-written

Lede

Date of occurrence and location it affected is missing from lede

Done. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 02:45, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

a 77-paragraph detailed study by German scientist Gottlob Burchard Genzmer, which was published one year after the tornado occurred. → "77-paragraph detailed study" change to "detailed 77-paragraph study" , "which was published one year after the tornado occurred" delete "which was"

Done. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 02:45, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"several tree branches were believed to have been thrown into the atmosphere" → change "were believed to have been" to reportedly

Done. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 02:45, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"Large hail, reportedly reaching 15 centimetres (6 in) in diameter covered the ground, caused significant crop and property damage, killed dozens of animals, and injured multiple people in a large stretch around the tornado and to the northwest of the tornado's path." → "Large hail, reportedly reaching 15 centimetres (6 in) in diameter covered the ground. The hail caused significant crop and property damage, killed dozens of animals, and injured multiple people in a large stretch around the tornado and to the northwest of the tornado's path." break in two sentence

Done. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 02:45, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Body

"and uprooted oak trees and beech trees." → "and began uprooting oak and beech trees."

Done The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:00, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"The tornado escalated into F2–F3 intensity as it threw two children" → "It escalated into F2–F3 intensity, throwing two children"

Done The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:00, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"Several geese were "smashed" by hail around this time as well, and the tornado grew" → "Around this time, several geese were "smashed" by hail, and the tornado grew"

Done The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:00, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Is there a name for the lake mentioned in the first paragraph? Perhaps Genzmer's description has it

Genzmer's report is in German and due to what it is, I am unable to translate it easily. The academic paper did not mention the name of the lake, so unless someone can translate all of Genzmer's report to check, I do not think the lake's name is known. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:00, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"the tornado" is used in excess, so avoid that repetitive language in para 2

Done: Replaced two "the tornado" with "it". The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:00, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"The tornado increased in severity as it tore the bark from an oak tree at F4 intensity" → "The tornado intensified, tearing the bark from an oak tree at F4 intensity"

Done The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:00, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Para 4: "oak and beech tree forest" → "oak and beech forest"

Done The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:00, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Canzow is the settlement just west of Woldegk where the article described damage, it's probably worth mentioning

Done: added "near the settlement of Canzow". The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:00, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"the tornado struck an airborne flock of geese, killing some and injuring 60–100 geese" close paraphrasing needs attention. Try "Further to the northeast, the tornado caught a flock of geese in flight, killing some and injuring between 60 and 100 geese.

Done The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:00, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

References & verifiability

Lede

The Patowary ref is cited as a news article, though I have strong doubts. First, every article is authored by the same person, and the author's linked profile leads me to speculate this source is a blog. At the end of the blog, it cites the ECSS 2015 conference and Norddeutscher Rundfunk, which are already referenced in this article. Per Wikipedia's policy on blogs, Patowary ref must be removed and replaced if necessary.

Done: Removed. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:18, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This may be a similar case with the "Vista al Mar" ref

Done: Removed. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:18, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

T11 claim supported by European Severe Weather Database, does not speak of wind speed. Can you include a reference for that?

Done: Reference added. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:18, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"Most of the information known about this tornado came from a 77-paragraph detailed study by German scientist Gottlob Burchard Genzmer, which was published one year after the tornado occurred." : Genzmer's ref is unnecessary, Strüber of NDR went with "56-page" so can we stick with that?

Not done I'm going to disagree with this change. ESSL and the academic paper specifically reference Genzmer's report, with the latter saying, "The report (consisting of a foreword and seven letters with total 77 paragraphs) is addressed to the minister of Mecklenburg-Strelitz who asked the author for a survey of the damage and the circumstances of this natural disaster." For that, I will not remove the reference and will not change it to "56-page". The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:18, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"... injured multiple people in a large stretch around the tornado and to the northwest of the tornado's path." : the two refs afterwards aren't necessary once the contents in the body are verified (with the same refs).

Done: Refs removed. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:18, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Body

Para 1 and 2 exclusively cite the ECSS ref so one in-line ref at the end of each para would suffice

Done: Additional in-line refs removed. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:18, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"the lake's water rose in what was likely a seiche and then retreated around the time of the tornado", no mention of a seiche in the ref

Done: "Seiche" removed. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:18, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The database in-line ref immediately after the 3rd sentence of para 3 isn't needed

Done: in-line removed. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:18, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The ESSL ref assigns the mansion damage F5, while NDR source says the basis for F5 was "oak stumps torn from the ground". Vista al Mar appears to be a blog. Database ref doesn't explicitly say it is maximum damage, is this screenshot part of a larger archived database?

Answered below in MOS-section. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:18, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"After destroying the mansion, the tornado quickly weakened to F1 and left a 500-metre (550 yd) wide path of light damage in a forest." unreferenced but the corresponding ref is probably ECSS

Done: In-line for ECSS added. Despite it being references two sentences back-to-back, the preceding sentence has a direct quote, so the double in-line is needed in my opinion. It can be removed if necessary for the GAN though. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:18, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Entirety of the last paragraph cites ECSS so only one in-line citation required at the end

Done: Addition in-line refs removed.

MOS

WP:Overcite issue addressed above

I presume

Done? The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:25, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Please include the original url and archive date of the European Severe Weather Database ref

Done: Reference of the ESWD was copied from Tornadoes of 2024. Note, the ESWD is an auto-updating reference which only displays the latest 25 reports (99% chance they are all from the day you open it). Users have to manually change the date. I am just adding that reference, since readers/editors have a few manual steps to actual verify the reference, now that the Internet Archive screenshot (not ESWD archived link) was removed. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 02:51, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Norddeutscher Rundfunk ref is missing publication date

Done: Reference fixed up. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:25, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Coverage

Fine

Overall

This is a really interesting albeit short article. There's problems with some of the references here, and the prose can be further refined. The nominator has another seven days to address the GA concerns before I can pass this review.Dora the Axe-plorer (explore) 19:20, 18 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@WeatherWriter are you going to respond to the comments for the GAN? Otherwise I will close this review by Friday PST as failed. Dora the Axe-plorer (explore) 01:56, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Dora the Axe-plorer: I have made the necessary changes I believe. If I missed something or additional changes are needed, please shoot me a ping! I do appreciate you taking the time to review the article! The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 03:26, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the prompt response! Ill go through the changes again and i can eventually pass this if all is good. Dora the Axe-plorer (explore) 04:00, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Alright one more nitpicking, the Feuerstein reference says the wind speed for T11 is 468 to 515 km/h whereas the article claims T11 is at least 480 km/h. Can you clarify this and also add cite for the respective tornado scales in the footnote? Dora the Axe-plorer (explore) 15:11, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I think this is now

Done. It gets really confusing since the TORRO scale, in actuality, is obsolete and is barely used anymore (actually only used now-adays by the TORRO organization). TORRO's own website on the scale doesn't list the wind speeds for T11, but they do mention "T8, T9, T10, T11 are violent tornadoes" below the chart. T10 goes to 299 mph per their own scale. ESSL mentions the tornado was rated T11/F5, but only this tornado holds the T11 rank. Every other T10 tornado has already been converted to F5 or IF5, so I am 99% sure this is the last "violent" tornado on the TORRO-scale. Basically, just an archival fact now. T11 exists per TORRO, but since T10 ends at 299 mph, it is 300+ mph. I added the TORRO-scale website to the citation. Hopefully that fixes the issue and helps explain why it seems like a pain to verify this. TL;DR - T11 exists, but does not exist at the same time. The Weather Event Writer (Talk Page) 15:55, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the explanation. I will pass this article the green light for GA Dora the Axe-plorer (explore) 23:46, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]