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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 00:35, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]


I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:35, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • @Sturmvogel 66: - I've rewritten the lead to provide more context, tried to ensure that the contextual transition between battles is present, and made a few other minor corrections, such as clarify whether loss numbers are total casualties or just deaths. I'm ready for a full review whenever you want to read through this one closely. Hog Farm Bacon 04:15, 15 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • No DABs
    • Hatted and removed the unecessary (Confederate) in the first sentence
  • Needs some maps.
    • Added two
  • although regimental positioning prevented it from taking part in a follow-up charge unneeded detail for the lede
    • Removed
  • Awful lot of "regiment" in the lede. Mix it up a bit.
    • Done
  • the defenses of Little Rock proximity alert for the city name. Perhaps, "outflanked the city's defenses"? and something similar in the 1863 section where there are 3 Little Rocks in consecutive sentences.
    • Done
  • Confederate charge at the Battle of Jenkins' Ferry, change to "attack" to avoid proximity with charge
    • Done
  • saw no more major action awkward
    • Is the new phrasing better?
  • Early in the fighting, Parsons' Brigade proximity alert, change to "the brigade" and the same for Burns' Brigade in the last section
    • Done
  • playing a role in participating in
    • Done
  • Trailing comma after Arkadelphia, Arkansas
    • Added
  • Why was the regiment redesignated?
    • Not specified in sources
  • driving Burns' brigade from the field capitalization
    • Done
  • Really gotta sensitize yourself to using names in close proximity. While understandable, it's doesn't flow well.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:52, 17 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]