Talk:1000 Forms of Fear/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 18:52, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

General

Some problematic links here

@Calvin999: All

Done — HĐ (talk) 13:27, 14 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Each of the three paragraphs in the lead starts with 1000 Forms of Fear'. Try to use other ways like "It" or "The album", too.

Done

1000 Forms of Fear also incorporates → It also incorporates

Done

songwriting skill as well as the album's lyrical content → Is this kind of one and the same?

Done

Remove repetition of "atop" in two successive sentences. "charted" / "peaked" ?

Done

The lead feels slightly sparse. How about some promotional performances being included? Awards won for the album and how "Chandelier" was Grammy Nominated.

Done

was made available in January 2015.→ Slightly ambiguous as to what is it available for.

Done

Background

managed to start a career → and established a career

Done

Any info as to why she decided to go back to singing? First paragraphs says she retired, second says she recorded vocals for a possible new album. There's no in-between.

Actually it has already been mentioned. Sia signed to RCA Records with the release of the album as a contractual obligation.

Ah okay. I was getting a bit confused. — ₳aron 09:25, 16 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Singles

There's lots of repetition of "the single". Five times in the first paragraph alone.

Done

Promotion

Sia recruited Maddie Ziegler → Sia recruited Ziegler

Done

Kirsten Wiig is also an actress (arguably better known as)

Done

Critical reception

It's quite quotey, try to paraphrase some of the quotes so it doesn't read like a list as quotes.

I tried the best as I could.

Certifications

You can include United States and write 177,000, just leave the certification blank.

It will, in my opinion, look not really nice. HĐ (talk) 05:45, 16 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Most articles include it, because it's a sales and certifications table, not just certifications. — ₳aron 09:25, 16 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

References

Some of the work parameters in the references are not linked the very first time, perhaps one or two after. Such as Billboard being linked in ref 5 but not ref 3.

Done

NY Times in ref 4 needs linking (it's linked in 12)

Done

56 for example is missing Billboard
Just go through the refs and check them again.

Done

Outcome

Thanks for your patience. Short but sweet article. On hold for 7 days days. I have over 2,300 articles on my watch list so ping me when you need me. — ₳aron 14:20, 14 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I have addressed all of your concerns. Thanks for your review, HĐ (talk) 05:45, 16 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

All Done

Well done. Passing. — ₳aron 10:52, 16 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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