Draft talk:Library of Ruina

Peer Review Comments 11/4

What does the article (or section) do well?

I like how the page is laid out and think it's a good platform to expand upon. It looks like you plan to expand upon each of the characters of the game, potentially describing each of their abilities. I think this could be a strong point of your page, as people who play the game might be interested in learning about each of the character's strengths and weaknesses when they decide how to build their deck. I also like the small tables you have on the right hand side that give easy to read facts about the game and the game review and development.

What changes would you suggest overall?

I think I'd like to see more background information about the game - being someone that hasn't played the game nor the prequel it was challenging to understand right away. In particular the sentence, " In the main screen, players are given the option to create an invitation, manage the librarians, or burn acquired books," I didn't know what the significance of the invitations are, or what it meant to burn the books, which are presumably important game mechanics.

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution?

It looks like you plan to expand further on what you have so I don't have too much to add. If you fill in the blanks I think this would be a strong page. Like I mentioned, I do think adding more about the character's abilities ad the background of the game mechanics would be helpful to the reader. If possible, adding screenshots of characters and/or from the game would be helpful to understand what they look like, the style of the game, game mechanics, etc.

Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own?

I'd like to add in the small tables that have compact information - I think that's a great way to present facts about your topic that some readers might be looking for quickly.

GWCR6 (talk) 18:11, 4 November 2022 (UTC)

Feedback from JackJames37:

What does the article (or section) do well?

The article looks very official, it follows the documentation of other video game explainers. It also does a great job staying neutral, as only the facts about the game are laid out, with no personal opinions about the gameplay or company producer.

What changes would you suggest overall?

No major changes needed, other than filling up unwritten sections. Possibly at a link to the lore behind the game, for those who aren't familiar with it. That being said, it is unlikely a user with no knowledge of the game would be viewing this article.

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution?

I would add links to the voice actors if possible, but that is the only real feedback I have.

Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know!

The use of a table of contents and other figures adds credibility. I will do that on my own later on.