User:Hprice1986/Tender is the Flesh/Mbb5c Peer Review

General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Hprice1986, Dmiksa, Alg9f

Link to draft you're reviewing

User:Hprice1986/Tender is the Flesh

Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes

(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

Guiding questions:

• Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? I am viewing the latest update, but it will not reflect the peer review since this is the review itself.
• Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes, however, I am left unsure as to the dates of publication
  • The date of the original publication can be put in as easily as “...novel by Argentine author Agustina Bazterrica, published in ___ by the ____publishing company.”. I know the publication date in the translated version will be different, but the dates give the reading an idea if this is a recent book or not.
  • The translated "The novel was originally written in Spanish, and translated by Sarah Moses in ___ by the____publishing company".
  • The last line, "He is gifted his own personal head, and begins treating her as human." kind of gives off an idea that he continues to treat her. I would recommend possibly adding a final sentence that mentions that he kills her. I think it would add a final wrap-up of the whole thing.
• Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? There was a context page at the top that included every section.
• Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? No.
• Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? It is concise.
  • I would include a sentence including the prize that the book won, since there is plenty of room and it is a notable achievement.

Content

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes.
  • One minor thing is that I was confused with the plot summary was talking about a "head" when I am guessing it is a person and it made me think that it was out of place. One little sentence of explanation can clear that up!
• Is the content added up-to-date? Since this is a working draft I will assume it is.
• Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? Yes.
  • A sub heading for the awards would be helpful because there is a possibility that the book may win another award. It would be easier to add each award in a list format.
  • If possible, maybe add a sentence or two to the topics and dig a bit deeper into some examples of cannibalism and factory farming like how you did with the euphemism section. If would be too tedious don't worry about it.
  • You definitely do not have to, but since this was such an interesting book, I think you could pull some author or translator information and create another section dedicated to that. There is always a chance that some of the authors personal experiences/views can influence why she chose to write about this topic.
• Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? Yes.
  • It address some current topics in the themes sections in their relation to the book. In addition, they also address how those topics are perceived in the modern day by including a section of reception.
  • I do not know is anything will come up, but maybe if you find an article about factory farming or meat consumption in Spanish speaking countries you can include that and tie in some possible influence.

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added neutral? Yes.
  • It is very informative and I feel like the main parts of the book where explained well.
  • I do not feel like it tried to persuade me to any side of an argument.
  • There is nothing that appears to be biased, but I did notice that the section is really long. I really appreciate cutting each major event into a paragraph. I am going to reread my sections and cut down any extra transition words and I would recommend doing the same thing.
• Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No.
• Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No.
  • I do not know if any negative articles exist, but if they do, do not be afraid to add them.
• Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No. Although the book may be, the article leaves it up to the reader.

Sources and References

Guiding questions:

• Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes. Each link had a source that is not biased and the websites also appear to have many other reviews of other authors, which is always great.
• Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.) Yes. I read through them and I could related every citation to the sources.
• Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes. The sources are not short and give some really interesting opinions on the novel
• Are the sources current? Yes. The oldest is from 2015, but all the ones directly related to the book are very current.
• Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? Yes.
  • I think the authors are a mixture of Latino and White people, which is strong to have since this is a translated book.
  • Also there is a good mixture of gender, which is great. The range of topics they address from the book is also pretty good considering how many themes are covered.
• Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.) I did some searching but only found a review on GoodReads.com and Simon & Schuster.
  • Here are the links for them: https://www.simonandschuster.com/books/Tender-Is-the-Flesh/Agustina-Bazterrica/9781982150921 and https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/49090884-tender-is-the-flesh
  • The GoodReads is not a review so I would say the article had much better references.
  • However, the Simon and Schuster did have some author information which can be added to form a picture of her to the readers.
  • Other than this, I would say the references used was really reliable and my searches led back to those same articles.
• Check a few links. Do they work? Yes everything connected well.

Organization

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes I could follow it very well.
• Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? Not really.
  • The only sentence that stood out to me was the line "The owner explains the entire process of raising the head, noting important things like First Generation Pure (FPG's), the head that were born in the breeding center.". It was confusing so I had to read it a couple times.
  • Besides that, I saw nothing major so I would just say to read the paragraphs out loud. This always help!
• Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes.

Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

• Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? No
  • I would research if the book cover is under copyright. If it is not, then try to find an image of the author.
  • One of the review articles had an image of a man on a conveyer belt. You could include an image similar to this, or even an image of a factory farm next to the subtitle to give the reader some idea of what it would look like.
• Are images well-captioned? Does not apply
• Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? Does not apply
• Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? Does not apply

Info box

• Is there an infobox? No
  • But, this is a draft and it is really easy to add one. It is in the insert -> template -> type "infobox". It will show all the types of information you can add including dates, authors, titles, genre.
• Does the info box contain relevant information: title, author, translator, language of original text, publisher, date of publication (original and trans into English)?
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