Talk:Witch-hunts in India/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 14:14, 21 April 2023 (UTC)

Comments

This article is on an interesting topic, is well-cited and generally well-written. I have very few comments to make.

• The first sentence "Witch-hunts in India are still prevalent in the twenty-first century." is somewhat forced; I suggest we forget the boldface/title match and just write "Witch-hunts are still prevalent in India in the twenty-first century."

• It is somewhat underlinked; for instance National Crime Records Bureau should be linked at first mention in the article body (it's already linked in the lead).

• A little copy-editing would be desirable, for instance to remove the word "also" from most (if not all) of the places where it's used.

• "For instance, a labelled 'witch' can have her right to own property denied, she may be forced off her land in fear of being attacked, by being banished from her village or even killed.[9]" should be split into two sentences; the second half needs a comma after "village", and the "even" should be dropped.

• "State Commission for Women and Action Aid Commission" - not clear what is intended here, is that not two things? Perhaps the first is National Commission for Women, in which case it should be renamed and linked.

• The images are correctly licensed. I guess the Indian Rebellion image is just about relevant enough to clear the "not decorative" bar, and appreciate it may be hard to illustrate village life appropriately here.

• The references are in an acceptable format, though 12, 20 and 21 need a publisher or website, and 28 should have the publisher separated from the title.

• Spot-checks are all ok.

Chiswick Chap Thank you for taking the time to review the article. Hopefully, I have addressed all of the issues raised here to your satisfaction. In response to your fourth point, I have now clarified that the "State Commission for Women" is The Uttarakhand State Commission for Women and is separate from the Action Aid Commission. Please let me know if you have any further suggestions. Schnitzella (talk) 16:59, 21 April 2023 (UTC)

• Many thanks, and congratulations on your first GA! There is no quid pro quo in the GA system, but of course if you'd like to pick something from the GAN queue to review, it'd be much appreciated. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:56, 21 April 2023 (UTC)

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