Talk:United Air Lines Flight 736/GA1

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Reviewer: ---Dough 48 72 22:44, 17 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Comments:

"the United airliner" sounds colliqual. This is in multiple places.
Are the notes in the article supported by references?
"approach to Nellis" also sounds colliqual.
"Decatur Blvd.": "Blvd." needs to be spelled out.
Citation needed for the list of the two nearby crash sites.
The bulleted list of crash sites should be turned into prose.
Are there any picutres of the crash that can be added to the article?

I am placing the article on hold. ---Dough 48 72 22:44, 17 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for taking the time to review the article.

Fixed.
Three of the four notes already had references. It was a little bit tricky to get the imbedded references to work within a note. Having to nest using the #tag template isn't very intuitive. I've commented out the uncited note because I now believe it's no longer needed. I only needed it early on when I was just starting out with the article, and I had many fewer sources to work with. Now that I've found other authoritative sources that by sheer numbers overrule the couple of websites that have incorrect last names for two of the crew members, I don't think it's necessary to explicitly tell the reader which last names are correct for two of the crew.
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I've been looking for photographs extensively. I found generally poor quality photos of the crash site but it appears they are still under copyright to various agencies like AP. I've also tried to find a free photo of a United Airlines DC-7 without luck, so far. One possible photo I might be able to use is alleged to be 'Copyright Civil Aeronautics Board', but since that was a U.S. Government agency I suspect it's actually public domain. The photo is already mentioned in the article, but only as an external link, here. --Itsfullofstars (talk) 03:06, 18 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I will pass the article. ---Dough 48 72 03:08, 18 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. An update: I sent an email to the Aviation Safety Network and they changed the copyright assertion to public domain for the photo I mentioned above. It's now in the infobox. I'm still looking for a free image of a United Airlines DC-7, preferably in flight, to complement the photo of the F-100F. I still haven't found a copy of the official accident report for this crash, either. I guess I'll have to make do with the sources I I've already found. --Itsfullofstars (talk) 04:36, 25 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]