Talk:Mandalorian (character)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Adamstom.97 (talk · contribs) 01:29, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing this review purely as a fan of the show. From a quick glance the article looks in-depth and well sourced. I'll take some time to have a good read of it and then come back with some thoughts. - adamstom97 (talk) 01:29, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Adamstom.97 for taking on the review! — Hunter Kahn 19:11, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The article is in depth, well sourced, and well presented. However, I am concerned with the large plot summary in the "Appearances" section. Usually for TV series the guideline is to keep a plot summary for a season below 500 words (per MOS:TVPLOT) and this page has more than double that for what is a relatively short and not very plot-heavy season. I appreciate the work put into writing the summary and referencing it well, but this is a definite issue for me (especially with more seasons to come, this is only going to get much bigger). Can you see what can be done about that? Also, here are a few smaller issues I have found:

I have always found "fictional character" to be redundant, just "character" should suffice as a character is inherently fictional.
- Changed. — Hunter Kahn 14:57, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Is there a way we could combine the (2019) and (The Mandalorin) in the "First appearance" section of the infobox? Having the two parentheticals beside each other looks odd.
- I've changed to a way it's done in other Mandalorian character articles that I think addresses your concern. — Hunter Kahn 14:57, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
an infant of the same alien species as Yoda I feel like we don't need to explain this in the first paragraph of the lead given the article is not about that character. I think the link in the lead and an explanation in the article body should suffice.
- Works for me. Removed that from the lead. — Hunter Kahn 14:57, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The costume presented challenges for the actors portraying the Mandalorian, and ... this sentence in the lead seems like it would more naturally fit with the previous paragraph, leaving the last paragraph to discuss theme and reception.
- I generally try to keep paragraphs in the lead at about equal length, and doing this makes the third paragraph very long and the last one very short. But that might not really matter at all, lol, so as long as you're OK with it, so am I. — Hunter Kahn 14:57, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Isn't "back story" only one word?
- I've seen it both ways, but I've made it one word. — Hunter Kahn 14:57, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
accept assistance with others should this be "from others"?
- Oops, yes. Fixed. — Hunter Kahn 14:57, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
the series premiere episode this should be just "the series premiere" or "the series' premiere episode".
- Changed to the former. — Hunter Kahn 14:57, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Favreau is a long-time Star Wars fan, and the Mandalorians are one of his favorite groups of characters from the franchise. You could add here that Favreau previously voiced a Mandalorian in the Clone Wars TV show.
- Added. — Hunter Kahn 14:57, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Some of your online sources have been archived, but not all of them. I would strongly recommend doing this.
- I used the IABot the archive more of the online sources. Thanks for pointing this out; I hadn't realized how many were not archived! — Hunter Kahn 14:57, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Using the copyvio detector tool there are a couple sources coming back with "Violation Possible". I do not think there are any actual copyright violations in this article, but it would be good to give those areas a c/e to make sure the tool only shows "Violation Unlikely" results at worst.

Let me know once you have worked through these points or if you have any questions or concerns. - adamstom97 (talk) 23:29, 9 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I've made some changes in response to the copyvio review, so it says "Violation unlikely" now. I've also tightened the season one synopsis to 500 words per your suggestion. Let me know if anything else needs to be addressed. Thanks Adamstom.97! — Hunter Kahn 14:57, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Good work on those changes. I'm happy with the coverage, real-world discussion, quality of writing, and sources. This is definitely a good article in my opinion, so I'm going to pass this review. Congratulations, and good luck with the other Mandalorian character articles. - adamstom97 (talk) 22:18, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the review, Adamstom.97! — Hunter Kahn 03:08, 12 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]