Talk:Tạ Phong Tần/GA1

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 15:28, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman 15:28, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks--I'll look forward to your thoughts. -- Khazar2 (talk) 16:06, 3 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

"When she began to blog, Ta Phong Tan still worked as a policewoman." Since it's the first sentence, the word still is offputting; remove, or give a bit more detail on when she started her police career if that info exists.

Done You're right; I've simply cut it. -- Khazar2 (talk) 17:30, 4 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The article feels quite quote-heavy to me. Some are fine, but there are a few that can be worked around. Given the size of the article there shouldn't be as many as there are.

Also a good point. Changed 4-5 of the snatches of quotations to paraphrases. Let me know if this addresses your concerns. -- Khazar2 (talk) 17:30, 4 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Just those couple minor points; article on hold. Wizardman 17:15, 4 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, I appreciate the input; just let me know if you spot anything else you'd like addressed. -- Khazar2 (talk) 17:30, 4 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good, article now passes. Wizardman 21:22, 4 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! -- Khazar2 (talk) 21:29, 4 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]