Talk:Ivan Asen I/GA1

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Reviewer: CPA-5 (talk · contribs) 13:31, 4 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I believe we should add "(died in 1196)" after "Asen I or John Asen I (Bulgarian: Иван Асен I)"
After the emperor had refused them The Emperor.
fled over the Danube, but they returned in the autumn Link Danube.
over the lands along the Struma river in the early The Struma River.
them to return to the Byzantine Empire in the autumn.[34][31][35] Re-order the refs in numerical order.
thus adopting the name of a 10th-century tzar (or emperor) of Bulgaria Link tzar.
Which English do you use? Because I can see some American v. British usages.
First Bulgarian Empire is overlinked.
Link Constantinople.
occupy new territories of the Byzantine Empires You mean Byzantine Empire?
I see eight howevers, maybe we should limit the word to max two howevers?
Cumans is overlinked.
The emperor dispatched Alexios Gidos and Basil Vatatzes The Emperor?
the Byzantine fortresses along the river Struma leaving The River Struma?
for a huge ransom from the emperor The Emperor?
tsar v. tzar maybe standardise one of the tsars?
Isaac Komnenos persuaded Ivanko to kill the tsar The Tsar?
with a sword hidden under his garments.[71][67] Re-order the refs in numerical order.
became the emperor of Bulgaria in 1218 The Emperor?

@CPA-5:, thank you for your comprehensive review. I fixed the above problems. Sorry, I do not know which English I use. Borsoka (talk) 00:47, 8 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I think American because it was written in American first so remove the hyphens and replace the space in the words counter-offensive, counter-attacks and merge counter-invasion. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 18:19, 8 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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I'll do this tomorrow.

O City of Byzantium, Annals of Niketas Choniatēs's source needs a Google Books' URL.
Some ISBNs have hyphens while others don't maybe standardise them.
The Crusade of Frederick Barbarossa needs a Google Books' URL.
Chary's book needs a Google Books' URL.
Curta's ISBN goes to another book. Wrong ISBN?
Fine's book needs a Google Books' URL.
Standardise Brill and BRILL.
Petkov's book needs a Google Books' URL.
Same as above.
The rest looks good.

Infobox

@CPA-5:, thank your for your further comments and suggestions. I think I fixed the above problems. Please let me know if any further action is needed. Borsoka (talk) 03:39, 9 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I see here and there "the emperor" instead of "the Emperor". For the rest, it looks good to go. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 20:30, 9 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. I fixed. I did not change one sentence, because it is a quote. Borsoka (talk) 00:02, 10 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good to me, I'll pass it. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 14:45, 10 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Again thank you for your review, and also for promoting the article. Have a nice week! Borsoka (talk) 00:52, 11 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]