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Reviewer: Wizardman Operation Big Bear 21:32, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Overall the article is good, though I found a couple issues:

  • "On July 18, the attack jumped off, with the force spearheading the French Tenth Army's assault the high ground south of Soissons and cut vital rail lines." Confusing at the beginning (jumped off), reword. Also, should be 'cutting vital..' I think.
  • "III Corps took the Army's east flank, would protect the flank as the Army advanced to Montfaucon, then Cunel and Romagne." Feels like a word or part of the sentence is missing.
  • You seem to interchange inactivated and deactivated. I would stick with one (ideally the latter).
  • Is the Fort Hood shooting relevant enough to the corps that it could be added in? I'll leave that up to you, I'm not certain either way.

I'll put this on hold and pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 21:32, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I have responded to your points, thank you for reviewing the article. —Ed!(talk) 15:49, 3 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Everything looks good now, so the article passes GA status. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 17:18, 6 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]