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GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 01:20, 1 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Will review soon. Ruby 2010/2013 01:20, 1 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Please use:  Done/ Not done

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Comments

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 Done
  • "...in response to a oncoming hurricane." -> an
 Done
 Done
  • "The episode was well-received by television critics, who praised the humor and cultural references. " -> its
 Done
  • "This episode was written by..." -> "Hurricane!"
 Done
  • featured... featured (use of same word in lead; switch it up)
 Done
  • For the production section, you jump into the "crossover event" pretty abruptly. I know the lead already talks about it, but you need to write the body as if the lead isn't there (hope that makes sense)
 Done
  • Tense issue: ...event if this one receives successful ratings." -> received
 Done
  • Who is Mike Barker? A writer? Producer? For which series?
 Done
  • Make sure sentences with direct quotes end with a citation directly after sentence (Barker quote, look for others)
 Done
  • "In April 2011, the executives of the Fox Broadcasting Company..." Removed bolded
 Done
  • "MacFarlane later agreed with the decisions after being consulted with the executives of Fox, and a spokeswoman for the company later announced that the episode would air the succeeding season.[7]" Don't you mean MacFarlane consulted with the executives (rather than them consulting him)?
I'm not sure who came up to who first.
  • I think you should change casting to Writing and casting (b/c you mention the writers)
 Done I just organized the section into one.
  • "...first time Henry made a guest appearance on the show since" the show -> American Dad
 Done
  • Why do you have two different quote box colors?
 Done Removed other quote box.
  • Use consistent date formatting for refs
 Done
  • "...according to the Nielson ratings.[17]" Removed bolded
 Done
  • It could use another review or two for the reception section
  • "...Dyana Maria deemed the episode as "classic", expressing..." as -> a
 Done
  • Were there any cultural references you could add? (reliably cited of course)

I'll place the review on hold for a week while the above comments get addressed. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 02:59, 1 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The cultural references will not be reliable sourced, unfortunately. As for the reviews, those three were the only ones available. I can reformat it to make it look larger. - DAP388 (talk) 00:59, 3 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Should be good now. :) - DAP388 (talk) 22:06, 4 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good. Happy to pass this one for GA. Ruby 2010/2013 23:00, 4 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]