Talk:Hurricane! (American Dad!)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 01:20, 1 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Will review soon. Ruby 2010/2013 01:20, 1 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Please use: Done/✗ Not done

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments

There's one dab link

Done

"...in response to a oncoming hurricane." -> an

Done

Indicate Seth MacFarlane was the co-creator of all three shows in lead

Done

"The episode was well-received by television critics, who praised the humor and cultural references. " -> its

Done

"This episode was written by..." -> "Hurricane!"

Done

featured... featured (use of same word in lead; switch it up)

Done

For the production section, you jump into the "crossover event" pretty abruptly. I know the lead already talks about it, but you need to write the body as if the lead isn't there (hope that makes sense)

Done

Tense issue: ...event if this one receives successful ratings." -> received

Done

Who is Mike Barker? A writer? Producer? For which series?

Done

Make sure sentences with direct quotes end with a citation directly after sentence (Barker quote, look for others)

Done

"In April 2011, the executives of the Fox Broadcasting Company..." Removed bolded

Done

"MacFarlane later agreed with the decisions after being consulted with the executives of Fox, and a spokeswoman for the company later announced that the episode would air the succeeding season.[7]" Don't you mean MacFarlane consulted with the executives (rather than them consulting him)?

I'm not sure who came up to who first.

I think you should change casting to Writing and casting (b/c you mention the writers)

Done I just organized the section into one.

"...first time Henry made a guest appearance on the show since" the show -> American Dad

Done

Why do you have two different quote box colors?

Done Removed other quote box.

Use consistent date formatting for refs

Done

"...according to the Nielson ratings.[17]" Removed bolded

Done

It could use another review or two for the reception section
"...Dyana Maria deemed the episode as "classic", expressing..." as -> a

Done

Were there any cultural references you could add? (reliably cited of course)

I'll place the review on hold for a week while the above comments get addressed. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 02:59, 1 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The cultural references will not be reliable sourced, unfortunately. As for the reviews, those three were the only ones available. I can reformat it to make it look larger. - DAP388 (talk) 00:59, 3 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Should be good now. :) - DAP388 (talk) 22:06, 4 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. Happy to pass this one for GA. Ruby 2010/2013 23:00, 4 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]