Talk:Journey to the Far Side of the Sun/GA1

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Reviewer: • Ling.Nut 11:03, 10 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

That is one huge WP:LEAD for a minor film from decades ago. Will take a closer look tomorrow. • Ling.Nut 11:03, 10 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I see no point in the gray boxes sprinkled throughout the article. They are not pull quotes. They add nothing. personally, I'd simply delete them all, though perhaps they could be tweaked to conform to WP:MOS.
The bright orange bar atop one table in the text is jarring.
many non-free images. That may be OK for GA, but may not be so OK if you try to take it to FAC.
The WP:LEDE, as I said earlier, is huge. It needs to be drastically trimmed.
the text is a bit rambling and scattered. perhaps I can look at it more closely soon.
More later • Ling.Nut 10:43, 22 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

OK, perhaps the lead section is thorough to the extent that it becomes rather long. I'll see about removing some of the minor details in a few hours. Super Mario Man 17:51, 27 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Now shortened. Super Mario Man 15:54, 31 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

On the subject of the quotations (eight quote boxes), where specifically do they fail to conform to the Manual of Style? Does the reduced lead section deal with your concerns? Do you have any further elaborations or new points to make? Super Mario Man 01:52, 6 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"As a matter of style, quoteboxes should generally be avoided as they draw special attention to the opinion of one source, and present that opinion as though Wikipedia endorses it. Instead of using quoteboxes to highlight its notability, explain its importance before introducing the quote or in an introduction to the quote." WP:QUOTE. • Ling.Nut (talk) 01:57, 6 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"and especially avoid decorative quotation marks in normal use" WP:MOSQUOTE... • Ling.Nut (talk) 01:59, 6 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
The lead is much, much better. Thank you! • Ling.Nut (talk) 02:07, 6 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Why do we need a box for the supporting cast? Overkill, don't you think? • Ling.Nut (talk) 00:46, 10 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

'PASS GA • Ling.Nut (talk) 01:02, 11 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the pass,and also for the handful of edits that you made earlier on. I've cut out the quoteboxes from all but the "Reception" section. By the way, on the subject of the table, I wouldn't agree that article is overdoing it - it's not an excessively long table, in my opinion. Thanks once again for this review! Regards and best wishes, Super Mario Man 02:52, 11 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]