Talk:Dead Island Reveal Trailer/GA1
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 20:13, 2 August 2016 (UTC)
Mine. JAGUAR 20:13, 2 August 2016 (UTC)
- The lead would be better off being merged into two paragraphs
- "The team also had the goal to show the inevitability and the helplessness of a family in a zombie outbreak" - the development team
- "The trailer was produced by Scotland-based Axis Animation" - the article says Glascow, so it should be Glascow-based Axis
- "and the community reaction led Techland" - de-link Techland here
- "immersion and tone, but it received criticism" - however
- "According to Techland, it is a game about killing zombies, not a game focused on delivering an emotional experience" - this sounds like it's still anticipating the game, but it was released in 2011. I'd change it to past-tense
- "The team worried that the action and violence featured would seem excessive" - was worried. Also, can this paragraph be merged into another? It's choppy
- There's a citation needed tag in the Reception section
- "Keith Stuart from The Guardian compared it favourably" - does this article use American or British English? Should be consistent
- Rename "Plot of the trailer" to just "Plot"
- No dead links
- Dab links OK
Quite decent. On hold until all are addressed. JAGUAR 20:21, 2 August 2016 (UTC)
- @Jaguar: Thank you for the review! I have fixed the issues mentioned above. AdrianGamer (talk) 03:35, 3 August 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks! This is good to go now.
JAGUAR 13:13, 3 August 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks! This is good to go now.