Talk:Chak De! India/GA1

GA Review

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Hi, I am reviewing this article for GA and have entered my comments below. It is a wonderful article, and all of my comments regard minor points that will be easy to fix. —Mattisse (Talk) 20:39, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

• "(who was likewise accused of throwing a match against Pakistan during the 1982 Asian Games)" - haven't mentioned the fictional character's having done this yet.
• "It was also reported as influential when the Indian Hockey Federation was suspended in April, 2008." - clumsy - Its influence was again emphasized when... or some other wording you like.
• memsaab - should not have external links in the body of an article.
• "He acted as the coach and trainer for the cast..." confusing, as it first it seems like you mean he was playing the role.
• "cast because they are actual hockey players.' - probably best to say "were" because they were at the time, but as for the indefinite future, when this article is read, they will not always be hockey players.
• The section "Chak De girls", be consistent in using the period rules - using no period for incomplete sentences, period for complete ones.
• Consistency needed with dates: either dmy or mdy (probably dmy for India). Also, the dates should be delinked. I can run a script to do that once the dates are consistent.
• "Further reading" should go below "Notes" per WP:LAYOUT
• Under "Notes" and "Further reading", none of the titles should be in all caps.

Meanwhile, I shall put the article on hold. —Mattisse (Talk) 20:39, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

Thanks Matisse. I made the changes and have noted what I did below each request. Please let me know what else needs to be done. Regards, -Classicfilms (talk) 22:28, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

• "(who was likewise accused of throwing a match against Pakistan during the 1982 Asian Games)" - haven't mentioned the fictional character's having done this yet.

I deleted this phrase because it is non-essential and the sentence still works without it.

• "It was also reported as influential when the Indian Hockey Federation was suspended in April, 2008." - clumsy - Its influence was again emphasized when... or some other wording you like.

I changed it to: "The film's influence was emphasized when..."

Changed again to: "The suspension of the Indian Hockey Federation in April, 2008 emphasized the film's influence" which is a better sentence. -Classicfilms (talk) 22:47, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

• memsaab - should not have external links in the body of an article.

I removed the link.

• "He acted as the coach and trainer for the cast..." confusing, as it first it seems like you mean he was playing the role.

Changed to: " Negi coached the cast stating..."

• "cast because they are actual hockey players.' - probably best to say "were" because they were at the time, but as for the indefinite future, when this article is read, they will not always be hockey players.

Changed to "were..."

• The section "Chak De girls", be consistent in using the period rules - using no period for incomplete sentences, period for complete ones.

I made a few changes here - adding "is" and "from" in addition to your suggestion above. Take a look and see if it is consistent.

• Consistency needed with dates: either dmy or mdy (probably dmy for India). Also, the dates should be delinked. I can run a script to do that once the dates are consistent.

Ok, take a look. I went through and found every date that needed to be changed to dmy and did so. If I missed any let me know. And yes, please run the script for any dates which I did not delink (I did most but not all).

• "Further reading" should go below "Notes" per WP:LAYOUT

Done.

• Under "Notes" and "Further reading", none of the titles should be in all caps.

Done - I think. Please take a look and see if I missed anything.

• I can't figure out why the record title/ singers don't line up. —Mattisse (Talk) 23:26, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

Final GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): well written b (MoS): Follows MoS

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): Well referenced b (citations to reliable sources): Reliable sources c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): Sets context b (focused): Remains focused on subject of article

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias: NPOV

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Wonderful article. Congratulations! —Mattisse (Talk) 23:26, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

Thank you! -Classicfilms (talk) 23:34, 19 January 2009 (UTC)