Talk:Warsaw Ghetto boy/GA1
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 00:38, 18 October 2018 (UTC)
Opening statement
[edit]I am reviewing this article as the WikiProject Germany Coordinator, and am on good terms with the article nominator, Catrìona. On the topic of the article for review, I have done some token work on the SS man in the picture, Josef Blösche
In every review I conduct, I make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use 
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Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. —Vami♜_IV♠, 00:38 18 October 2018 (UTC)
Referencing
[edit]Citations 6 and 19 are the only foreign-language references without the |language= parameter. Replace "Notes" and "Citations" with actual headings. —Vami♜_IV♠ 00:38, 18 October 2018 (UTC)
Done
Notes A and D can and should be reduced to the article prose. A specifically could be the final sentence in the Lead, and D in parentheses after the portion of German text it translates. —Vami
- Done
Note A (new, different from above) and B: Can you include the source of each quote in the note? Like, —Vami
Haaretz: "One of the most compelling and enduring images of the Holocaust"
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Background
[edit]Can you add more context on the Warsaw Ghetto? —Vami♜_IV♠ 09:28, 18 October 2018
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- Excellent, thanks. –Vami
The hopeless act of defiance became
Not NPOV.
- Changed to a direct quote.
For comparison,
Delete.
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Photograph
[edit]Participants on an Internet forum
Two notes: Change "Participants" to "Users" or "Members", and credit the internet forum.
- Done
("Now \'43")
Delete quotation marks and replace with italics, per Wikipedia:Manual of Style#Titles of works.- Occurs to me now that the section of the MOS I linked says "or in quotes". —Vami
Cusian may have claimed to have taken the photograph.
"May have claimed"?
- An article was published in which he claimed to have taken some photograph in the Stroop Report. The newspaper published two images to go along with the story, including this one, but it wasn't clear from the article whether Cusian was actually claiming to have taken this photograph.
The court did not accept this excuse.
NPOV: change "excuse" to "defense".
Fixed
soldiers; the
Split sentence.
- Done
Identification
[edit]Star of David armband
"Star of David" is linked, but could you link Yellow badge?
- Yellow badge is linked, piped to Star of David. Expanded pipe to cover armband to be less eastereggy.
the Łowicz Ghetto; in 1941, the ghetto was liquidated and its residents sent to Warsaw.
Consolidate. Consider:the Łowicz Ghetto, liquidated in 1941 to Warsaw.
- Done
An anonymous Holocaust survivor
No name, no bolded text.
- Done
but since he said that the photograph had been taken in 1941 and other details do not match, this claim has not been taken seriously.
Assumed gender? Consider:but because of the claim that the photograph was taken in 1941, and other erroneous details, this claims has been dismissed.
- Source states that he was an anonymous man from London.
Matylda Goldfinger-Lamet[23] [...] Einsatzgruppen[9]
MOS:REFPUNCT
- Not sure how this applies here. MOS:REFPUNCT to my knowledge only covers cases where the punctuation is right next to the reference. I'd prefer to keep the ref tags where they are for maximum verifiability.
- The only exception to punctuation before citation is dashes. However, I don't see "punctuation must proceed references" so maybe I interpreted this section of the MOS wrong. –Vami
Blösche appears in several of the photographs in the Stroop Report, which were used as circumstantial evidence in the prosecution against him; tried in East Germany, he was convicted of the murder of 2,000 people and executed in 1969.
Split sentences.
- Done
Lead
[edit]Reviewed and good to me. —Vami♜_IV♠ 11:15, 18 October 2018 (UTC)
GA progress
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