Talk:2021 British Athletics Marathon and 20 km Walk Trial/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:55, 5 May 2021 (UTC)
Am going to review MWright96 (talk) 17:55, 5 May 2021 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Lead
[edit]- Wikilink 20 km walk and marathon only on the first mention outside of bold text
Background
[edit]- "UK Athletics had considered using the Manchester Marathon as a trial event or holding a trial event near Dorney Lake," - try to avoid using trail event twice in a single sentence
- "It was the first dedicated marathon trial event since 1980, as the London Marathon is traditionally used as a qualification event" - repetition of "event"
- "Due to the COVID-19 pandemic," - don't think the name of the disease is needed since it is already mentioned at the end of the previous sentence
- Who is Richmond Runfest?
- "almost 1 mile (1.6 km) in length." - could do with a little rewriting since it is too close to the source verifying this information
- "the qualification times were 2:11:30 for the men's race, and 2:29:30 for the women's race." - repetition of "race"
Done Including as much as I can about Richmond RunFest. They organise running events in Richmond area of London, and can't find much else about them. Joseph2302 (talk) 17:04, 7 May 2021 (UTC)
Competitors
[edit]- "whose personal best time was under 2:10:00," - set at which event?
- "Other competitors included Cameron Corbishley, Daniel King, and Dominic King; Dominic King had set a British record" - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this
- "The race also featured Gemma Bridge, Heather Lewis and Erika Kelly," - maybe switch the names of Kelly and Lewis so its in alphaebtical order?
- Marathon and 20 km walk should be wikilinked to the relevant articles only on the first
- Wikilink the terms 10 km walk to 10 kilometres race walk, 3,000 metres to 3000 metres race walk and 5,000 metres to 5000 metres race walk
Race summary
[edit]- "The 20 km walk event commenced at 06:00 UTC, and the marathon event commenced at 08:00 UTC." - repetition of "event"
- "His time was 40 seconds inside the qualifying time." - repetition of "time"
- "which contained only Connor and Aadan.[8] Aaden finished the race in third;" - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this
- Personal best and Jess Piasecki are linked in this section and don't need to be since they are already linked in the section coming before this one
- "It was Davis' personal best time, and was inside the Olympic qualifying time by over two minutes." - same point as the second query in this section
- "by over two minutes." - more than
- "which was 30 seconds outside the qualifying time,[8] but was a personal best time.[14]" - same point as the second query in this section
- "he was at pace with the qualifying time, before his pace slowed due to the weather." - Anyway the text in bold can be worded to avoid repetition of the word "pace"
- Done all of these now. Joseph2302 (talk) 15:02, 6 May 2021 (UTC)
Results
[edit]- Per WP:DTAB, tables need a caption: add |+ your table caption to the top, or if the caption would duplicate a nearby section header, you can make it |+ your table caption instead so that it only shows up for screen reader software.
Done caption added, don't think it needs to be more descriptive than just saying "men's/women's finishers". Let me know if you disagree. Joseph2302 (talk) 16:04, 6 May 2021 (UTC)
- Looks acceptable MWright96 (talk) 18:26, 7 May 2021 (UTC)
References
[edit]- All those references who have authors listed in the original website should be added in
- It should be mentioned the two The Daily Telegraph sources shoulds require registration for access
Done Added authors, and marked The Daily Telegraph as needing subscription (although weirdly, I can access it without registration/subscription). Joseph2302 (talk) 17:15, 7 May 2021 (UTC)
Am putting the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 19:03, 5 May 2021 (UTC)
- MWright96 I believe that I've resolved all the points mentioned. Please can you have a check and let me know if anything else needs fixing? Joseph2302 (talk) 17:15, 7 May 2021 (UTC)
- @Joseph2302: Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 18:26, 7 May 2021 (UTC)