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I guess the first thing is a question. Are you writing an autobiography or are you employed by this person or are related to him in any way? If so, please read WP:COI and implement the requirements there.
Your current draft is full of what Wikipedia calls "Peacock phrasing". Adjectives praising the subject with no evidence to substantiate such wording. Even in the firts sentence we have dedicated, distinguished and prominent. None of those are justified by reliable sources and all should be deleted.
This brings up the issue of sources. Every significant statement of fact needs to be supported by a reliable and independednt reference (see WP:REFERENCE for more on this)
There are also some formatting issues. The Wikipedia manual of style deprecates bolding of sub headings (and most other things except the initial mention of the subject's name).
